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Hit the dirt!
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Hit the dirt! |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298
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Hit the dirt! not having endured an explosion of this magnitude she was wise to start the reconnaissance mission promptly, recovering scattered bits seemed of the utmost importance after gathering the fragments together she rolled herself into the corner and prayed for cohesion [This message has been edited by jellybeans (02-23-2004 12:17 PM).] |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I really like the ending of this... I understand praying for cohesion. *S* Excellent work, my friend... the format adds a great visual! *S* |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
well just like my arms around my knees most of the weekend, this one just formed itself thank you lady |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I can understand the form well nice write JB |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
OhJelly~ You would just have to know all too well, that you word-painted this one complete~ Yes, I know that knee-hugging ... this is simply an intense ache waiting to be *hugged* ... and sooooo, I do~  *Huglets* AGAIN ~*Me ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
Hi Jellybean, This is a beauty! The external images add to the lived experience of an internal world oscillating between cohesion and smithereens. You describe a very familiar place...~P |
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