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Mental Freezing |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
I wonder when words will begin their natural flow Beyond symbol-letters and puzzles I try to show; The desires of letter play overpower my word, And I doubt that my messages are fully understood. I’ve tried to play with rhythms and tried measuring, But something is missing, the freeness unheard. I just don’t think like a poet should, but more, more As a novice architect, planning a design Or a carpenter using poor grades of wood, Not finely tongued to slip with ease Into the grooves that others could. My words, never smooth. And I wonder, Shall I stick with made-up puzzles Losing form and fluency; I wonder where to go. If even I’d express clearly my thoughts to myself, They’d come out uneven: The keys I’d quickly tap Would fill words with mental freezing. [This message has been edited by Sadelite (02-09-2004 08:18 AM).] |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
C -- you are doing great -- just breath! This was very good! love you! |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Thanks, JO. Am in a real slump! Have a good evening. Thanks again. ~c |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
You're doing just fine!  Excellent write. Hugs~ ~ I like not only to be loved, |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Enchantress, Do you ever feel this way? Thanks for the pat on the back. ~Sadie |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
for having a difficult time, you sure made that read easy...well done...sometimes just being able to write about not writing is enough to kick-start your poetic soul |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big angel hugs) I understand this dilemma, sweet friend, I love poetry to be free and wild-spirited but sometimes we tend to fall victim to form and the layout just doesn't work as all the thoughts we wish to convey just overflow the chamber space of a stanza! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, I love your poetry always no matter how it is constructed, yay, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sadelite, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "You'll find something that's enough to keep you |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
keep looking up, you'll find what you're seeking |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
thank you, everyone. i appreciate your comments... Sadie |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Or a carpenter using poor grades of wood, Not finely tongued to slip with ease Into the grooves that others could. My words, never smooth. Hey now, this reads like a fine polish to me. It's true, we're our worst enemy and harshest critic. This is really good and honest, and I loved it!! WIHWT. Much enjoyed Sadelite~ |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Blues Serenade, Your comment was so sweet. Thank you. I guess you are right-we are our own harshest critic. Sadie |
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