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Laoha Member
since 2003-03-07
Posts 161Nevada, USA |
11 Staring at 11 of the 11th floor Two strangers Standing at the elevator door Waiting No words 2/3/2004 |
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McLean Member
since 2004-01-05
Posts 484state of marital bliss |
I find that to be an uncomfortable silence. Eleven is an interesting choice. Mclean |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
Especially when the two guys are Toerag, and Balladeer! Sorry guyz... I couldn't help meself...  |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Hum -- 11 is usually a lucky number, right?! Maybe the strangers won't remain that way?! Interesting writing. |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
you have captured the awkward so adeptly...good write |
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Laoha Member
since 2003-03-07
Posts 161Nevada, USA |
Look at the number 11 Doesn't it look like 2 people with their heads raised and the chins up? Awkward is right. Once the silence started, it's like that. No words, but it doesn't mean there is nothing to say. Who knows what's going on in their minds. |
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Laoha Member
since 2003-03-07
Posts 161Nevada, USA |
iliana: You are right, "strangers" was not the right word here, I changed it to "homo sapiens". |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Even better! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I could see the scene and remember a time or two that I was there |
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Laoha Member
since 2003-03-07
Posts 161Nevada, USA |
11 Staring at the number 11 of the 11th floor Two homo sapiens Standing at the elevator door Waiting No words edited 2/11/2004 |
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