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Plastic Flowers |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Plastic Flowers My plastic flowers droop today Weighted with the dust of gray Hanging in a patch of sun Where fade has bleached the colors dun. And here I sit in comma’s stare Half alive and half aware Looking through the mist of time Acting like a pantomime Reactions run an algae pace And covers me a drafty lace The cold seeps through the blankets coup And all that’s left are thoughts of you I wrap these thought around my bones They warm me with their overtones And hold my hand a mental grip That heats them like a hot wax dip The plastic flowers do not stay They fade a little more each day. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
fresh flowers...you need fresh flowers  M |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
How about a real garden with living flora? Plastic will always remain such, no matter how beautiful... Good morning to you, Sy. -MVS You CAN make a difference: |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Morning Sy...and you know.. real flowers have a much better scent. Excellent morning write. ~Morning hugs & tea, Nancy~ ~ I like not only to be loved, |
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Michelle_loves_Mike
since 2003-12-20
Posts 1189Pennsylvania |
With my brown thumb,,,,I have to go with the plastic version, lol,,,good write Michelle |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
The plastic flowers do not stay They fade a little more each day. Hey Seymour, fresh flowers are better, though they don't last as long.  Hugs, my friend,  Ethel |
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Bohemianaus Member
since 2003-01-05
Posts 69Australia (South Gippsland) |
Can't stay there forever, Seymour - been there, I know - nice write though. God bless and keep you, Namaste! Boh |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Seymour, this was so sad, but the writing was exquisite!  |
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EvocativeVerse2 Senior Member
since 2003-09-10
Posts 1279 |
Hey Seymour. Love this piece. Plastic flowers? Mmm...I can hear my wife screaming at you from her greenhouse already! (Snicker!) I get the intent of what you are saying in the poem though. It is a sad piece...but well forged and worth the read. Bravo my friend. Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history! |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Hi Sy....a very good read....and well formed poetry in motion....love to read you |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
And here I sit in comma’s stare Half alive and half aware Looking through the mist of time Acting like a pantomime Reactions run an algae pace And covers me a drafty lace The cold seeps through the blankets coup And all that’s left are thoughts of you I wrap these thought around my bones They warm me with their overtones And hold my hand a mental grip That heats them like a hot wax dip ========================= I got knews for ya me sweet Sybabers... No one "half alive and half aware" writes this clever and consistantly well day in and out. Reactions run an algae pace And covers me a drafty lace tis couplets of way cool like those that prove me mothy point. ~~~~~~ There's no thrill in plastic daffodils ... and wax poppies are like sleeping pills. I'll pick you some daisies and some posies ... I'll plant you an Eden of red rosies of supposies. *L*  ( need to bury my muse in the garden, she writes fertilizer these days.) LOL *ww*    There is a pleasure in the pathless woods. There is a rapture on the lonely shore. I love not man the less ... but Nature more. Lord Byron |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
But who wants to gaze upon fake No matter what a view they make Their color's fine for a short while But they've no scent to make one smile There are no thorns that puncture skin But there's no vibrancy within When we need comfort for life fractured What use is rose that's manufactured? A plastic posy just isn't right For one who "sees" with more than sight But fading flowers do not decry Heart's true connection... that doesn't die. I liked this very much, Seymour... my fingers just took over... sorry! *S* |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Maureen, I know, I know. MARK LOL and plastic flowers to you. Nancy, Thanks for the excellent. hugs Michelle, I'm glad someone understands. Ethel, You are a doll. Hugs Bohemianaus, Thanks for the read and comment. iliana, Thanks for the exquisite. EvocativeVerse2, Thanks for the bravo my friend. LeeJ, And I love to read you. Hugs. JM, There's no thrill in plastic daffodils ... and wax poppies are like sleeping pills. I'll pick you some daisies and some posies ... I'll plant you an Eden of red rosies of supposies. I'll hold you to that. WWRS suthern, But the reading of your fingers were a delight. Hugs |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Loved the overtones Sy~ You're writing is so very much alive and always in full bloom!  |
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jaicie114 Senior Member
since 2003-09-27
Posts 750On the edge of forever |
Awwww, Sy... How could anything fade with such wonderful verses like this written about them? Thank you. Love and Light...jc This I know as Truth...we are all Beings of Light. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
BluesSerenade Thank you sweet. jaicie114 Nice comment, thank you. |
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Youngatheart Member
since 2003-12-30
Posts 333 |
You are such a special writer. Who else could select the subject of artificial flowers and write such a perfect poem? I really enjoyed this. Youngster |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Sy, This is an awesome piece, so much enjoyed. I have to say this stansa cought me so in the moment, I just read the book (The five people you will meet in heaven) and my thoughts have been so like your words, thank you for the wonderful poetry. "And here I sit in comma’s stare Half alive and half aware Looking through the mist of time Acting like a pantomime" Love, Cerenity |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
this is kinda sad Sy but as always, a good piece |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Youngatheart Your comment is a delight. Cerenity My love, passing, Thank you my dear. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
The passage of time is so eloquently described here, dear Seymour. The cold seeps through the blankets coup And all that’s left are thoughts of you Melancholically beautiful. Love and hugs. Margherita |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Margherita Thank you, |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Hi Sy! I really like this. I was going to say, atleast you don't have to water them. But, maybe if you had washed them, they wouldn't have faded. You could just paint them, then they would be as good as new. *S |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sy...tell me you don't really have plastic flowers, that it was just a metaphor...please!  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
SmartChick What you say is all true. Martie Yes my dear it is a metaphor. |
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