Icicles [haiku] - pipTalk Forums

How to Join	Member's Area	Private Library	Search	Sanctuary		Login
Main Forums	Discussion	Tech Talk	Mature Content	Archives	A home without a wall, Our haven without ends, A circle we all call Our Family of Friends!

choshi
Senior Member

since 2004-01-01

Posts 1184
New York

0 posted 2004-01-29 09:55 AM

frozen dusk
stretched across the porch rails;
icicle's shadow.

muted

Member Elite

since 2004-01-15

Posts 2949
Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving

1 posted 2004-01-29 10:17 AM

this reminds me of a tori amos song that gets a bit "racey"...
but yours seems pretty safe..

also, i like "frozen dusk"
almost sounds like a dessert
*pardon my playful mood*

~Dawn

Michelle_loves_Mike

Senior Member

since 2003-12-20

Posts 1189
Pennsylvania

2 posted 2004-01-29 12:20 PM

Love the visuals this work inspires,,,
Michelle

I wish all could find the true happiness I have found,,in the eyes of Mike

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

3 posted 2004-01-29 01:12 PM

choshi
Enjoyed the read.

choshi
Senior Member

since 2004-01-01

Posts 1184
New York

4 posted 2004-01-29 01:20 PM

this reminds me of a tori amos song that gets a bit "racey"...

Which song, I am not very familiar w/ her music...

but yours seems pretty safe..
also, i like "frozen dusk"
almost sounds like a dessert
*pardon my playful mood*
~Dawn

Don't apologize for your playfulness, I find it delightful...and catchy! Glad it felt safe [what if I had written "Emerging Dawn" or something like that....]

choshi
Senior Member

since 2004-01-01

Posts 1184
New York

5 posted 2004-01-29 01:21 PM

Michelle, Sy, thank yo both for your kindness.....~P

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

6 posted 2004-01-29 02:11 PM

That's a nice haiku, choshi~

scorpio
Member Ascendant

since 2002-10-02

Posts 5178
right...there

7 posted 2004-01-29 02:26 PM

Well done..and much enjoyed.

believe in what your heart feels...

choshi
Senior Member

since 2004-01-01

Posts 1184
New York

8 posted 2004-01-29 02:29 PM

Dear Blues Serenade and Scorpio,

Thank you for your kind comments ~P

muted

Member Elite

since 2004-01-15

Posts 2949
Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving

9 posted 2004-01-29 02:38 PM

think the song is called "Winter" (by Tori Amos)
sorta goes "icicle, icicle, where are you going? i have a hiding place where spring marches on, would you keep watch for me i hear them calling...gonna lay down..gonna lay down" well, wont go into the rest

darned good song...as i said, your icicle prompted this little karioke moment.

~Dawn

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

10 posted 2004-01-29 02:43 PM

Beautiful Haiku, much enjoyed!

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

11 posted 2004-01-29 04:00 PM

(smiles) God Bless You, sweet friend, I could feel the shadows forming over me immensely reading this with a feeling of solstice, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Paul, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"You'll find something that's enough to keep you
But if the bright lights don't receive you
You should turn yourself around and come back home" MB20

choshi
Senior Member

since 2004-01-01

Posts 1184
New York

12 posted 2004-01-29 05:46 PM

Dear, Gentle Spirit, Mistletoe Angel

Thank you for your kind comments..

~P

choshi
Senior Member

since 2004-01-01

Posts 1184
New York

13 posted 2004-01-29 05:48 PM

think the song is called "Winter" (by Tori Amos)

Thank you Dawn for the karioke moment and the song...~P

Kazm
Member

since 2003-11-13

Posts 99

14 posted 2004-02-12 03:07 PM

I envy anyone who can write these. You are VERY good at it.

Kaz

Grover
Senior Member

since 2004-01-27

Posts 1967
London, ON, Canada

15 posted 2004-02-12 03:28 PM

Nice image! Grover.

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

16 posted 2004-02-12 05:10 PM

Oooooo burrrrr! Choshi -- I liked this one, too!

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

17 posted 2004-02-12 05:12 PM

Excellent...glad this one popped back up!
Hugs~

  ~ Whatever our souls are made of,
      his and mine are the same. ~

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

18 posted 2004-02-12 05:15 PM

Choshi, this is a very good haiku.
I love these liottle haiku and senryu verses.

Hugs

Ethel

choshi
Senior Member

since 2004-01-01

Posts 1184
New York

19 posted 2004-02-12 05:28 PM

Oooooo burrrrr! Choshi -- I liked this one, too!

.....Thank you Iliana....

back...

choshi
Senior Member

since 2004-01-01

Posts 1184
New York

20 posted 2004-02-12 05:30 PM

Choshi, this is a very good haiku.
I love these liottle haiku and senryu verses.
Hugs
Ethel

Awww...Thank you Ethel, and for your warming

choshi
Senior Member

since 2004-01-01

Posts 1184
New York

21 posted 2004-02-12 05:33 PM

Excellent...glad this one popped back up!
Hugs~
  ~ Whatever our souls are made of,
      his and mine are the same. ~


Aww, thank you Enchantress....*hugs* back...~P

steavenr
Member Elite

since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

22 posted 2004-02-12 07:41 PM

everything comes together so well (form, imagery, meaning) in this excellent haiku...well done

choshi
Senior Member

since 2004-01-01

Posts 1184
New York

23 posted 2004-02-12 08:42 PM

excellent haiku...well done

Thank you Steven R....

~P

Sadelite
Member Elite

since 2003-10-11

Posts 2519

24 posted 2004-02-12 11:43 PM

Nice...
Sadie

choshi
Senior Member

since 2004-01-01

Posts 1184
New York

25 posted 2004-02-13 02:53 AM

Nice...
Sadie

~P

choshi
Senior Member

since 2004-01-01

Posts 1184
New York

26 posted 2004-02-13 02:54 AM

Thank you ~P

	⇧ top of page ⇧
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.