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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050
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Would You? What if all the stars burned out, a long long time ago? What if we’re on borrowed time, and we don’t even know? What if all we had were moments, till the end was here? Where is it that you would go? And who would you hold dear? What would be your final thoughts, and who would they contain? What if every tear we wept, could take away our pain? A dream can never be a dream, if it’s not in your heart A life can never be a life, if we are both apart A poem can never be a poem, unless it’s from your soul The end will never be the end, until you pay the toll What if forty rainbows came down, falling from the sky? What if there were streams of hope, and wishes floating by What if everyone we knew, was taken far away What if all the dues we owed, we didn’t have to pay What if all we had were sunsets, glistening with gold? What if we regained our youth, and never could grow old? A wish can never be a wish, unless you close your eyes A day can never be a day, unless the sun can rise A heart can never be a heart, until we set it free A love can never be unleashed, until we find the key What if every whisper in the wind, flowed through your hair? What if every wish we had, we suddenly could share? What if every sparkling glimmer, shimmered in your eyes? What if now we never had to, ever say goodbye? What if all these things, were in a dream that just came true? What if I could not come out? Would you come with me too? [This message has been edited by Richy (02-11-2004 06:04 PM).] |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Richy -- remarkable poem -- profound questions! |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Hello Richy This was a truly wonderful piece of writing that posed a lot of questions to ponder over. "In our life there is a single color, as on an artist's palette which provides the meaning of life and art. It is the color of love" Take care.......Sue I am in motion |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
you really have so much beauty and whimsy and majick inside that heart of yours..this is a wonderful wonderful thought (poem)...but i think even if all my wishes could come true, even if i could never grow old, even if all things beautiful would only exist....i think i would prefer to live my life just the way i have been. i only appreciate my dreams because i know the difference. so if you are willing to sit on the sidelines..we can share a picnic rug  |
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James_A_Fraser Senior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 972Out Making Anticlines |
Beautiful, my friend. But I wish with my eyes wide open, and what I wish for held firmly in view. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Wonderful write Richy... this really gave me pause to stop and think. Well done. Hugs~ ~ I like not only to be loved, |
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Youngatheart Member
since 2003-12-30
Posts 333 |
aaaaaaaaawwwwwwwwwwww, Richy. This was such a sweet poem. I really liked these thoughts: What if all we had were sunsets, glistening with gold? What if we regained our youth, and never could grow old? |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
the age old question....very loving....  I really enjoyed this ~~**~~ |
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Snow
since 2000-10-16
Posts 1170desert flower looking for rain |
yes..... who wouldn't beautiful sentiments, richy... ~S "yet each man kills the thing he loves |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Richy Wonderful write and so many what ifs...Did you know that what ifs are a great writing tool? Take an ordinary situation and tilt it with a what if...and off you go. Enjoyed this, and you. |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
Iliana ~ Thank you iliana Always a joy to hear from you. I hope all is well Sue ~ Dear Sue, how are you doing? Thanks for always having something nice to say. It’s so appreciated. Dawn ~ Dawn, thank you. That was so nice of you to say that. You are really special to want to live your life the way it‘s gone. Knowing the difference myself, If I could, I would live my dreams, in a heartbeat... lol Life is wonderful... but I’m sure I could dream it up to be at least a little better. This was just one of those, how much are you willing to sacrifice for love, type of scenario’s. Oh, and that picnic on the sidelines... hey, that sounds like a nice dream right there... James ~ Thank you James. Yeah, whether or not your suppose to close your eyes when you make a wish, mine are usually open too. Maybe, that’s why they never come true... lol Thanks Again James, I appreciate your nice comments. I hope all is well Nancy ~ A big hug to you too Nancy! Thanks for always being there for me. I hope you know how much I appreciate that! |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
Youngatheart ~ Well, of course you liked that particular verse Young One... you’re Youngatheart... lol Thanks so much for all of the support you’ve lended me lately. I am indebted to you! Greeneyes ~ Thanks so much Lauren. It is so nice to see you here. I hope life is going wonderfully for you. Snowy ~ Ohh Snowy... how sweet of you... it’s more like “who would?” lol but... I thank you very much for saying that! |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
Martie ~ You know Martie, that must be why I use so many questions in my poems.. I need all the help, I can get... lol Thank you so much Martie... for just being you!  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wondering how I missed this... well, glad I found it sure needed this today Richy |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Richy And the andwer is...........What if? LOL Enjoyed. |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
Dixie ~ Hiya Dixie! I hope all is well? I’m glad you stopped by. It’s always nice to give someone something, they need. Please, take care. Seymour ~ You know Seymour... I guess it is... lol Thanks for coming by. It’s always nice to have you visit. |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
a dream can never be a dream unless your'e bound to wake. a life will never be a life unless the journey you should take. and maybe you wouldnt need the healing if dreams could end the pain but for all the moments suffered till now their lessons would be left in vain I read your words and feel their call of a wish of dreams come true but even through the sadness and strife always remember, youre special...JUST CAUSE YOURE YOU!! thought you needed another hug...and for love, true love, i would suffer anything, learn from it, and do it again if needed! its easy to "live the dream", but much harder to "leave the dream" behind...and feel the real grit... i love LOVE because sometimes it hurts so bad i know im ALIVE!!!! and you remember too,how alive you are! and no matter what....i still believe there is an amazing amount of beauty flowing from you... |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
what an eloquent response to that elusive "what if" well written...it flowed so well |
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nn Member
since 2000-09-18
Posts 75 |
Beautiful, deep and meaningful. |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
Dawn, that was just too sweet of you to do this! The poem was a delight, and your lovely thoughts, are felt deeply... I really love it! How did you know, I needed another hug? lol Well, I’m glad you did know, and I’m very lucky to have your friendship... Thank You I’m glad you’re here Dawn You have an aura about you, that lights up, this blue home of ours |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
Steaven ~ Steaven, you’re a very kind soul! And I truly appreciate your generosity... nn ~ nn, it’s a real pleasure meeting you! Thank you so much for stopping by. I really appreciated your kindness  |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I like this very much, Richy. *S* So much to think about... *S* What if all we had were moments, till the end was here? Where is it that you would go? And who would you hold dear? What would be your final thoughts, and who would they contain? I answered this part here. *S* /pip/Forum30/HTML/000480.html |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
Suthern, thank you so much for that I hope you don’t mind me copying your poem, that you linked here? It was amazing! And, I just wanted as many people to see it, as possible. Moments “If I have but a day Let me spend it with those I love Memorizing faces Visiting places That dry the tears with smiles. If there's only an hour Let me hold your hand Try to understand The miracle that graced my life When I met you. And if my time is over I pray that it is you My eyes last see. For if your voice I hear I know I'll have no doubt That heaven's near.” ~ Suthern When it comes down to it, - besides, our children - it is that one special person, who we would want in our arms, holding us, during our last breaths, and the final beats, of our heart. Who has made the biggest impact in our life. And who’s love, will always travel with, and be a part of our soul, wherever, we may be... Well... my two cents, anyway... Thanks Suthern This was truly wonderful! |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Well posed!!!! Perfect in thought and sound. Sadie |
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