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Sunder in the ambiance

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Tempest
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0 posted 08-25-2006 05:30 PM       View Profile for Tempest   Email Tempest   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Tempest


Sunder in the ambiance
Is all you can do
Ive been stabbed in the back
And betrayed by you

I can feel it,
So deep it dwells
It starts to writher
Then it swells

Anger feeds
This twisted beast
This demon inside

And all of a sudden
Im blinded with rage
Because I was played a fool
On this wicked stage

I start to swing
And you go down
You just lay there
Without a sound

I knew it would happen
One of these days
You would step up....
Only to fall,
flat on your face
© Copyright 2006 Bryan Girton - All Rights Reserved
mgoodman1989
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since 03-05-2006
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1 posted 08-26-2006 06:04 PM       View Profile for mgoodman1989   Email mgoodman1989   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mgoodman1989

Awesome, Can totally relate... Nice Job!

My favorite stanza is the last,

Much love,

Michelle
hunnie_girl
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2 posted 08-26-2006 11:32 PM       View Profile for hunnie_girl   Email hunnie_girl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for hunnie_girl

i liked this it had a nice flow hope to read more soon:P
hunnie*

A true friend is someone who reaches for your hand and touches your
heart.

the_girl_next_door
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3 posted 08-27-2006 10:27 PM       View Profile for the_girl_next_door   Email the_girl_next_door   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for the_girl_next_door

Wow.. i really liked this.. kinda morbid.. great job

~heather~

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

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4 posted 09-03-2006 07:58 PM       View Profile for *Alli4000*   Email *Alli4000*   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for *Alli4000*

Wow, I really liked this one by you.  Very nice.
Keep posting!

~Alli~
 
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