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hunnie_girl
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0 posted 08-24-2006 11:06 PM       View Profile for hunnie_girl   Email hunnie_girl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for hunnie_girl

sitting here in anticipation,
waiting to give him an interogation,
if he likes me that way,
and if he's willing to stay

if he loves me half the way i love him,
i'd be convinced he's not a whim,
because i love him more than just a friend,
if he doesn't feel the same way i will bend,

but i will not break,
for his sake,
i might be in a tight spot,
and my heart will be in a knot,

but i'll strive until it's done,
and in the end it's like i won,
it's over and gone now,
i'd let it go i just don't know how.

A true friend is someone who reaches for your hand and touches your
heart.

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1 posted 08-27-2006 09:14 PM       View Profile for stargal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for stargal

It's kind of confusing, no offence. I don't really know, it just seems like the story is muddled up a little bit, like you need to explain what is happening, a little more. This could just be me though, I get confused a lot.

I liked the usage of a willow tree as the metaphor though. It was something that is common place, yet, it's still an interesting subject.

Thanks for sharing

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may be beautiful within."
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2 posted 09-03-2006 07:58 PM       View Profile for *Alli4000*   Email *Alli4000*   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for *Alli4000*

Hey Krysti! I kind of agree with stargal, in that towards the end of the poem it starts to get a little confusing.  But overall, a nice write by you.  Keep posting!

~Alli~
 
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