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She's Looking Good
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She's Looking Good |
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Stinky Twinkie Member
since 2002-11-26
Posts 204Dinwiddie |
I get those butterflies in my stomach, cause she looks like only she could and quite simply put....she’s looking good When she stepped through the door, on Ring Dance night I swear that it was that moment that those butterflies took flight She’s lookin good, she’s lookin fine in her t-shirt, her church clothes or those flannel pants of mine Every girl that ever thought they looked the best wouldn’t think that anymore if they saw my Jess She’s got those petty lips and pretty hips and smooth skin that covers every bit She’s got those pretty cheeks and pretty smile and everything’s in her own style She’s got those pretty eyes and pretty nose and everything that makes me want to get close If I could see her every day, you’d better believe I would and quite simply put....she’s always lookin good -Stinky Twinkie thinks she's lookin good.- |
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EverRuss Member
since 2003-12-31
Posts 66Indiana |
lol i cant help but to laugh when i read this poem. Its so true and real. Everyone knows what its like to see someone looking so good Dont you lock up things that you wanted to see fly, hands are for shaking not tying....Soundgarden |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
hehe. I liek this. It is funny. The poem was great. I dont know how guys minds work, but i know how it feels to see someone lookin good. hehe. Hope to hear more! ~kissa~ **~kissa~** |
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ascending_ecstasy Member
since 2004-01-21
Posts 102 |
I agree, it is a funny piece, but the rhyming is so forced. Perhaps do something about that? And structure... let it go... |
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