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PsychoticBunni
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Mythical Atlantis

0 posted 2003-11-29 02:09 PM



for Kieran

Falling up into the sky
Looking for that bright white light
Like a moth to a flame
a moth to a flame

Don't you see that we could be
As in love as Cupid and Psyche
As i look at your sweet face
I die a thousand wondeful deaths

If this is heaven let me stay
And I'll love you day after day
If this is hell... so be it
Let me burn forever

I give you my number when you sad you call me i make you happy- "Don't Worry Be Happy"

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magic_612
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since 2003-07-31
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1 posted 2003-11-29 02:42 PM


I really liked this one.. a beautiful piece. Thanks for sharing!
*Belabebeautiful*
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2 posted 2003-11-30 03:07 AM


The last stanza did it for me..I know that feeling well. Nicely done.
~Live and Laugh~

Because of you I laugh a little harder, smile a little more, and cry a little less
~Bella~

Spine Grinder
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Standing In Silence...
3 posted 2003-11-30 10:31 PM


I liked the last stanza too. Especially these lines "If this is hell, so be it, let me burn forever." Good job.

I soak up all the pain, and accept it in silence~DMX

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