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Teen Poetry #7

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Kristabell
Senior Member

since 2003-11-29

Posts 678
Portland, OR

0 posted 2003-11-30 01:48 AM

Times of sadness and anger,
Can be over come,
Take refuge,
In a friend or a loved one.

When you think the world has turned on you,
Find that one special friend,
They will help you to,
Find your way back through to the end.

When you feel alone and empty,
Take a look inside,
You will always find,
That there is something that,
Lies firmly in your mind.

When you feel that all you have
Left are the bad memories,
Take them and throw them out,
They are not worth a pout.

Focus on the good,
And not the bad,
Because in the end,
You will only end up sad.

Show your friends that you care,
Make them feel welcome,
You never know,
When they could use,
A hand with despair.

wvplayernotreally
Member

since 2002-11-06

Posts 215
yakima wa

1 posted 2003-11-30 04:03 PM

another great poem. You can pull off the rhyming which is hard to do and to get the point across.

" I think I got a tan from the light in which i was basking."

broken627
Member

since 2003-11-26

Posts 66
Eugene Oregon

2 posted 2003-11-30 04:07 PM

wow your really talented!I cant wait to hear more!you've lightend up my day very much so!
Thank you!
-*-broken627-*-

drummerboy678
Member

since 2003-10-28

Posts 134

3 posted 2003-11-30 05:02 PM

Can I suggest trying the next poem you write to be a non-rhyming one?
Not that these are bad, but try one where you dont have to worry about words fitting with the rhyme, and you can just say how you feel.

Just a suggestion

Kristabell
Senior Member

since 2003-11-29

Posts 678
Portland, OR

4 posted 2003-12-01 07:21 AM

Yes, i will take your suggestion. Thanks for the tip.

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