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smalltownmind
Junior Member

since 2003-10-24

Posts 21

0 posted 2003-10-28 01:59 PM

this is a song that my band plays...i thought i would post my lyrics and get some feedback. if you would like to hear them email me...i should hopefully have the songs online soon.

Broken Wishing Star
by Small Town Mind

If you heard me cry
would you hold me tight
and tell me
"Everything will be alright"?

If I could give
you all of your dreams
would you say to me,
"You're not the one who's
in my dreams..."?

We've been through this
a thousand times before...
you always said
you always dreamed of
something more...

Chorus:
You wished on a star
You wished so hard
You found your love
Now you're on the run
and when all is said and done
you'll know that I am not
the one for you...

I tell myself
that i can see through
all of your lies...
and all your compromises.

you make believe
that you can see
through me... you don't
understand me at all...

Chorus:

"if you want me back...you're gonna have to ask."

dertah
Senior Member

since 2003-06-18

Posts 584

1 posted 2003-10-28 02:04 PM

good oonnnnnnnnnnneeeeeeeeeeeee

LiL-Jew
Junior Member

since 2003-10-28

Posts 30

2 posted 2003-10-28 05:25 PM

This kind of reminds me of a country christmas song called "Holidays" but its really good, keep it up.

magic_612
Member

since 2003-07-31

Posts 190
NB, Canada

3 posted 2003-10-28 06:22 PM

sounds awesome! i would definately love to hear some of your songs

young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

4 posted 2003-10-28 08:38 PM

ummm....this was pretty good, it seemed to be kinds forced rhyming, but i bet it sounds better with music.

now im alone, but not lonely like before

lauren03
Member

since 2002-01-04

Posts 64
oh, usa

5 posted 2003-10-28 10:55 PM

hmmm............ interesting... little choppy at times though

peachesNcream
Senior Member

since 2001-08-21

Posts 513
Ocean Of Tears

6 posted 2003-10-29 12:00 PM

This was a good poem. But I espically want to comment on your quote. It's from The Used, right? Great choice!! LOL. ~Jess

"Some of us think holding on makes us strong; but sometimes it is letting go." -Herman Hesse

frolicking dolphin
Member

since 2003-02-23

Posts 268
my own special world

7 posted 2003-10-29 03:16 PM

I really liked that one, and I'd like to hear some of your song but i don't know how to email you cuz you don't have the little email thingy as an option, either that or I'm just stupid which is very possible

~*~Karen~*~

~Dream like you'll live forever,live like you'll die tomorrow~

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