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vampiana
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since 2004-09-08
Posts 296
Nothing and Nowhere

0 posted 2005-01-02 12:44 PM



You've pushed me aside
now here I lie,
in the dark, the dark.

Trying to crawl,
grab onto you,
please rescue me
from oblivion.

But don't hear
my silent screams, as
they penetrate through
the air.
And you turn a blind eye
as I bleed in front
of you.

Ain't it great?
Using your power
to ignore,
to shatter
and destroy me.

Pride is holding your head up, when everyone else has their's lowered. Courage is what makes you do it.

© Copyright 2005 Kirsty - All Rights Reserved
aussie teen
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since 2003-09-27
Posts 396
Australia
1 posted 2005-01-02 07:01 AM


this is amazing kurst...
i love your writing. its so vivid its like its being shown in front of me whilst im reading....
love this the most

Ain't it great?
Using your power
to ignore,
to shatter
and destroy me.

keep your writing coming...
Ruth

live life as if your going to die tomorow....... but love as if your going to live forever......

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At the edge and a doorway,TX
2 posted 2005-01-02 04:31 PM


"Trying to crawl,
grab onto you,
please rescue me
from oblivion."
-----------------------------------------------

Now that was just wonderful. I could see the person in my head crawling across the floor trying to reach but never get. Great imagery!
Thank you for the read.

Love,
Ladycat

Insanity in individuals is something rare but in groups, parties, nations and epochs, it is the rule.-Friedrich Nietzsche

silhouetted
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since 2004-01-30
Posts 537
New Zealand
3 posted 2005-01-15 06:19 PM


i also loved the same stanza ladycat did. this was sooooo good, its so great to be back!

you are so brillant, and always know i am here for you to talk, or to say nothing at all.

laura

you're the only one keeping me alive

Hollow_Emptiness
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since 2004-02-01
Posts 715
New Zealand
4 posted 2005-01-15 08:30 PM


Wow! Loved this one, so good, everyone is so great today in their writing!
Good to hear from you Kurst,

Hollow.
Courtney.

You just got to see me through another day
My body's achin' and my time is at hand
And I won't make it any other way

darkness_witch
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since 2003-12-03
Posts 516
Underneath
5 posted 2005-01-16 04:18 AM


wicked wicked work

loved it so much, i also loved the way it was set out for some reason.

loved every bit of it, ahhh just awesome

hehe re read that with an american accent... love it!

love and empathy
sophie

nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world.

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx
6 posted 2005-01-18 02:52 AM


Like lending a dead hand.  
Now watch it fall and slosh
Like seaweed.

And the thing about the American accent was pretty funny.  lol.

-GIS

Corruption is caused by holes in obedience to God.

Lexy
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since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038
California
7 posted 2005-02-08 06:56 AM


I love the disdain, the sarcasm.
I feel it too.

tecoyah
Member
since 2003-11-16
Posts 83
NY
8 posted 2005-02-12 09:22 AM


Dark poetry inspires one to write more. This is a very clear message and well done as well.
Not something easy to do.

Thank You

s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105
Watertown, NY
9 posted 2005-03-09 04:24 AM


Ain't it great?
Using your power
to ignore,
to shatter
and destroy me

I Love Those Lines, Amazing Write.

"Trina"

Happiness Runs From Me, For I Am It's Enemy, Anyone Who Has It, Is Someone I Envy...

Much Luv,
"Trina"

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