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Hollow_Emptiness Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715New Zealand |
Walk past another day Faceless, Hang my head Peek through my fingers Is the world gone yet? Is it safe to come out? Faceless, Change a few letters And I’m Fearless Shy away from another day Blankly, Shield my eyes Crawl out from under the bed Have you turned off my light yet? It’s too bright, isn’t it? Blankly, Change all the letters And I’m Alright I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World. |
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darkness_witch Senior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 516Underneath |
liked it but the end.... "change all the letters" thing just didnt tickle my fancy i really liked the first one cause the words actually linked but yeah. short and a bit too brief its good love and empathy sophie nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world. |
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News_From_Nowhere Member
since 2002-06-14
Posts 173CU, NY |
Proving that choice for Queen most exceptional! It took a lot of creativity to structure the two verses in exactly the same pattern & a fine job you did of it! Nice!! "So give life to your dreams, for there lies your survival, and cast your heart beyond those faded scenes, and I'll bring you through the storm" |
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Hollow_Emptiness Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715New Zealand |
Thanks News, lol, and I gree with you Soph, but what can I change blankly to? Arggh. Hollow. Courtney. You just got to see me through another day |
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