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River
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since 2003-09-16
Posts 627
my own little world

0 posted 2004-09-13 09:02 PM



Stupidify
your cold weary mind
hard wicked chance moves
behind your silver eyes

now you have no where to hide
funny how it seemed
you where so clever once before
just when pride took over
and went under
did you see the world
for what it really is

don't lie to me
I know your eyes
stop pretending
live your life

it makes me sick to think
I once loved you
makes me choke to think
I once touched you

now from this poison cup you drink
a death fit for a "king"
a king over my former obsession
a demon of my souls possession

twisted
your heart became
shattered to pieces all the same.

Running out of pain

© Copyright 2004 Bonnie Sue Bixler - All Rights Reserved
brezee
Member
since 2003-06-02
Posts 140

1 posted 2004-09-13 09:52 PM


This is awesome...

"don't lie to me
I know your eyes
stop pretending
live your life

it makes me sick to think
I once loved you
makes me choke to think
I once touched you"...VERY cool...i likes! great job!


~*brezee*~

brezee
Member
since 2003-06-02
Posts 140

2 posted 2004-09-13 10:02 PM


This is awesome...

"don't lie to me
I know your eyes
stop pretending
live your life

it makes me sick to think
I once loved you
makes me choke to think
I once touched you"...VERY cool...i likes! great job!


~*brezee*~

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx
3 posted 2004-09-13 10:50 PM


This is pretty sweet and I likes as well.  And I really love your critiques message.  Jesus is beyond explanation, comprehension, and understanding.  Actually I believe he's overwhelming to even think about.  I liked your piece.  hehe.
-GIS

He has made everything beautiful in its own time.  -Ecclesiastes 3:11

River
Senior Member
since 2003-09-16
Posts 627
my own little world
4 posted 2004-09-14 08:15 PM


awww, thank u guys! weea!!!

Running out of pain

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