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Gothika_07
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since 2004-01-15
Posts 61
new zealand

0 posted 2004-03-01 12:59 PM



I hate the ashen of your skin
the nakedness of your chest
I hate the sound of you heart
beating rich within my ear

I hate the fact your right
and i am subtly wrong
I hate the pain you do inflict
upon my broken swollen heart

I hate that you make my eyes blur
and you make my pian slowly withdraw
I hate you for what you made me
and the way i feel inside

but most of all i hate the fact
that the word hate
is always repalced
with the word
love

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silhouetted
Senior Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 537
New Zealand
1 posted 2004-03-01 02:13 AM


I hate that you make my eyes blur
and you make my pain slowly withdraw
I hate you for what you made me
and the way i feel inside

I loved this bit

Bex is this with whom i suspect?

Or is this with whom i do not know of?

Or is this completely fictional?

Call no man happy till he is dead.

eor
Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959
blues & greys
2 posted 2004-03-01 03:13 AM


subtly can kill slowly...nice write

"So what befalls the flawless?
Look what I've built, it shines so beautifully now watch as it destroys me."

darkness_witch
Senior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 516
Underneath
3 posted 2004-03-02 01:11 AM


woaaah

powerful....

kinda comercial, yano the whole BUT MOST OF ALL I HATE THE FACT THAT I DONT HATE YOU, NOT A LITTLE BIT NOT EVEN A TINY BIT NOT AT ALL... yada yada yada. sumthin along those lines.

it was good but the idea was a bit over-used if ya get me.

i can understand u just needed to release ur emotions.

yup

You can always hear a tear in Cobain's voice, the pain going on there is always visible through his lyrics - Marilon Manson

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