Dark Poetry #4 |
My MONSTER |
kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
WHy are you constantly torturing me? constantly patronizing me? Never letting me let you go. Never leaving me be. Always there. When i sleep. When i eat. Every moment of the day. Every Moment of the night, never letting me out of your sight. You creep into my heart, my mind, my soul, and you torture them. You slowly corrupt them, with your pain. My body in not your temple, it is not yours to slain. Only it is. You haunt my dreams... my thoughts. Bringing me down... down, down, down, into your twisted world of hate and sorrow. Your world is my neverending tomorrow. You are the monster under the bed. My monster. !!! I am not finished with this. There is just something missing that i havent found yet. Any Comments would be kool. !!! ~Vampire Kisses I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling |
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darkstar Member
since 2000-08-09
Posts 230Port Richey, Fl, USA |
hmmm...I like it so far. I don't know what you should add though. |
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silhouetted Senior Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 537New Zealand |
i love your poems because they tell such a twisted story that makes you want to read more you have a very very interesting writing technique and it makes amazing work! liked it a lot LOR In the bible on angels have wings, and the rest must wait to be saved - Jewel |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
Thanks ya guys!! I appreciate ur comments. I liked this one a lot too. There is just something... missing. I dont know what, but i'll figure it out!! ~lol~ Love ur latest poem silhouetted. And darkstar, i read urs earlier, very nice work!!! ~Vampire Kisses I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling |
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SwEeTnSeXy18 Member
since 2000-09-18
Posts 247nc |
Vampire kisses huh! So this is a inner monster? Hope you can tame it, I liked it and also dont know what may be needed to add. Lisa ~in order to gain, you have to lose~ |
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Xeonox
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764CA, USA |
your monster could be your ability to think and have wants. |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
hmm...whats that supposed to mean... lol Thnx. Karissa I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling |
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