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Alliance
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since 2003-11-27
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0 posted 2003-11-27 05:38 PM


This is my 2 post limit. This is a poem I have had since I was 13. I think it's one of my finest also.


Life is such that when we get the courage
to question what we believe in,
we try to seek the tree of knowledge
only to find it bears the fruit of sin.

It feeds our hunger for temptation
with the taste of sweet damnation,
and as it quenches the thirst within us...
it reveals the seed of truth that deceives us.

Life is such a tragic consequence
of this insignificant existence.
we are imprisoned by our freedom,
and enslaved by our own wisdom.

With all the love and hate that we create,
and all the hearts and minds we manipulate,
such is this painful life we must all endure...
an addiction that only death can cure.

© Copyright 2003 Alliance - All Rights Reserved
Sadelite
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since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519

1 posted 2003-11-27 06:18 PM


Hello, Alliance,
   It sounds like you were a pretty deep thinker at thirteen.   I wonder if your ideas have changed much since then.   I really liked the part about being imprisoned by our own freedom and enslaved by our own wisdom.  
                     Sadelite
P.S. Welcome to Passions...It's nice to have you aboard.

kissa~rachelle
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since 2003-11-27
Posts 988
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2 posted 2003-11-27 10:03 PM


I loved your poem! It was really deep, and insightful. Very true too!
~kissa~

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3 posted 2003-11-27 11:40 PM


Hi and Welcome to Passions....We are glad you have joined our family....


please check your email for a special greeting
kindly,


Greeneyes~

I had a dream last night
you came to me on silver wings of light
I flew away with you in painted sky
Was it real
Is it what you see,touch or feel

passing shadows
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4 posted 2003-11-28 03:25 AM


wonderfully done! and I think what you write is true

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