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Astro
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0 posted 2003-11-25 08:30 PM


Egg

Amazing how one look becomes a
Conversation.
You still haven’t said a word
But meditation says it all.
The bitter twists of your intent
Like vines, encompass and entwine
Squeezing with the stings of some
Imagined content.

The stench is drifting in billows
Plump like pillows,
Wafting from each of my ears.
Inside is a hard-boiled egg
Packed with protein-complex
Vita-regimens,
A power punch to your teeth,
So I can grin with the strength of
Tin men.

Still, you could catch the stench
With a fish net;
The air is so thick.
I feel like I can’t breathe.

I yearn for light-headedness
When light is fractured into
Black and yellow firecrackers
And everything grows dim.

I could find simplicity.
Slowly,
I could feel my body and soul.
Toes first, then the calves, knee-caps
Torso and head,
On to my soul, into my heart

Through all of the rage and tears
I’ve built into this life.
Into the times I’ve coveted God
-- The adoration He receives,
Wanting the world to look at me.
But we measure on the metric
I’m just egocentric.
My chakra is made of chalk.

This box is small from the outside.
The reek is mine to keep.

You could smell like honeysuckle
But this rotten egg is powerful -- virile.
Vile.

I’m on to you.
I want you to.

Sight is an always awful beginning

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1 posted 2003-11-25 10:16 PM


LOL, a very different type of meditation.
Oh, the rotten egg smell is vile, so I won't be tossing one your way no matter how thick your hide.
I much prefer night blooming jasmine, or honeysuckle.
An interesting, unique write, Astro.

steavenr
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2 posted 2003-11-26 12:45 PM


"The bitter twists of your intent
Like vines, encompass and entwine
Squeezing with the stings of some
Imagined content."

How aptly you have described the art of missed communication.

Very interesting read.  I think there is far more to it than a casual read affords.  I will read it again.

Astro
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3 posted 2003-11-26 11:29 AM


Yah, thanks for the replies. You hit it on the head. This is about miscommunication. At the time I was feeling very hurt by the tone of someone's voice. This poem is a satire of my nuerosis, which has, at its root, naught but pride (hence wanting to be God).
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