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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state 
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Forlorn world..to the chase of false caches beneath a letter and palm trees that sway the world is whatever you shape it to be otherwise you'd be on top of coconut trees. You came down to walk along the ground or did you arise after a week was found you gave everything for a chance at a win and the Russian roulette showed a bad spin... Remember Mr. Silvers as he rented a car The gas attendant thought he was a star There was news of riches at a place marked X, jalopies careened towards wealth amassed next Shadow box, invent weapons of mass disgrace Trump foreign chaos and civilian distaste, remember the promise of the land of the free the world is whatever you'll shape it to be... Remember Miss Merman, she shouted on her way she'd have her son follow and protect her stay there's was a race to the land of the free had no idea Tracey'd have it under lock and key. Elect muscular officials with box office success to bring in votes and flex brawn nonetheless, I look at Ancient Rome...see the cause of decay You still think the world is yours on a tray? From the magic spot, Tracey nabbed the loot the suckers lay chase and saw him scoot scaled a narrow fire escape in dead heat watched their efforts burn...they saw defeat.. [This message has been edited by ecrivan (11-23-2003 11:57 AM).] |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Martin, I love the rhyme in this poem. Very good writing, Sir.  Hugs  Ethel |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
they say history always repeats itself |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
ecrivan "the world is whatever you shape it to be otherwise you'd be on top of coconut trees." Good write. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
We think we know the ways in which to change our daily stays but like moths to a flame, [Oh No! A cliche!] We plod along into another day... ~*~ Smiling with you... we'll just try our best to make sure it's not too much of a mess for the ones behind us to clean up. |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Passing Shadows ....very true but I'd still like to ensure my family and friends can continue to walk on the ground, [This message has been edited by ecrivan (11-23-2003 12:05 PM).] |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Ecrivan -- just too good to not be seen again........BEEEEEEwell! |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Why thank you Iliana!This is too good to be true, so much of what we write sinks down this poetic list and you went so far to pick it up...I guess you must my stuff and it is a pleasure to share my ideas..happy holidays to you  [This message has been edited by ecrivan (12-21-2003 12:09 AM).] |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
And HAPPY HOLIDAYS to you, as well! It really did deserve to be brought back up, really. |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Just try to be myself...I do enjoy weaving past and present in my poems..and being somewhat cryptic...someone once commented why I use the medium of riddles... which is not far from the tone here. the last poem on 'what's your name' is applicable too to undersatnding how many people react in this socio-politically correct, xenophobic world of ours [This message has been edited by ecrivan (12-21-2003 12:34 AM).] |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
ecrivan -- you said in the latter poem, that a man named Innocent told you the story -- I bet there is a poem about that man, as well. Is there? |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
no but if I ask him about the thoughts behond the name I might have enough fodder |
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