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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2003-09-27 08:16 PM



Those rips
in my lace paneled sheers
tribal scarring
of the war
a thickened ridge
of skin
across
my forehead
tells the tale of was
luminescent
marks of stretch
boasts a belly
twice gave life
and beneath
above the door
a fine line
from the surgeon's knife
speckled arms
like fawn fur skin
(why would wound boast purity?)
remaining
white contrast of tan
reminding me...

reminding me.

Considering the fresh of kill--
see a corpse with course inlay
damaged goods
or life fulfilled?

I'll have it not another way--

remove the pins now from the map
and toss the ancient tired skins
stretch another canvas now
the journey
just began again.

© Copyright 2003 serenity blaze - All Rights Reserved
Ceinwyn
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1 posted 2003-09-27 08:17 PM


where does all this come from dear Lady!!

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

Sunshine
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2 posted 2003-09-27 08:20 PM



...from a look into one's true self, Ceinwyn...one who has the courage to face the mirror, and repeat the truth...

Well done, Serenity!

Brava!

Martie
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3 posted 2003-09-27 08:20 PM


serenity...perhaps success can be measured by the number of scars we have?  Got me thinking with this one...and counting.  
SharaRose
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4 posted 2003-09-27 09:51 PM


Some scars are from giving birth, but some go deeper.
Shara~

Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer!

Susan Caldwell
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5 posted 2003-09-27 10:22 PM


I bare the scars of life as well..

You always write it so well.


garysgirl
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6 posted 2003-09-27 10:32 PM


So do I, Susan....so do I....

Karen, sometimes even glorious happiness of love doesn't completely heal the scars.

Love ya, SereneOne  
Ethel

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7 posted 2003-09-27 10:43 PM


Serenity...There you go again, making me use my little brain trying to figure out what you are writing about. Your poems always intrigue me. I always have to try and put myself in your shoes and try to understand your poems, which is what I like most about them, they let the reader relate in a way that only they can.

So my gut feeling about this one is changing and coming to the reality of getting older and the changes it brings.
Like the old saying goes age brings experience and wisdom.
We ride the wave of life and do as we please, then the wave of life gives us a ride and we try to hang on for dear life.
The words of a dumb old coonass.
Oh by the way I really enjoyed the poem, but you should have already known that...Paul

"To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you"

icebox
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since 2003-05-03
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in the shadows
8 posted 2003-09-27 10:55 PM


Ain't life grand!



wandering glider
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since 2001-04-04
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aloft
9 posted 2003-09-27 11:32 PM


Is

tomorrow I'll rise
with the morning sun
aloft in the promised heat

and search again
transparent but alive
leading with a golden edge

Jason Lyle
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With my darkling
10 posted 2003-09-27 11:34 PM


Loved this Karen, raising my glass to new beginings.

Jason

KoKo
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Inside the shadow's shadow
11 posted 2003-09-27 11:40 PM


yup...liked this very muchly!
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