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Open Poetry #28

Testing The Limits

1slick_lady
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since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

0 posted 2003-09-13 12:25 PM

Testing The Limits

my eyes were covered
and the world was set in spin
judgment slid off kilter
losing the true north
suddenly it was my turn
slowly I walked the plank
awkward precarious steps
traveled cautiously forward
on a row of separate splinters
fear holding gripping a heart
in this chance risk of breaking
the sheer movement of breath
has the ability to change balance
suddenly without warning sight
I look ahead then back again
is there a purpose to either way
too late to turn back now so on
my toes curled around each notch
as I heard the split screaming wood
I tasted the water before I felt
the salty splash of gamble in try

"I am living a life, i have no wish to live. How did this happen?" Unknown

[This message has been edited by 1slick_lady (09-13-2003 12:38 AM).]

Kaoru

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since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

1 posted 2003-09-13 12:33 PM

You amaze me, with each word.

Another stitch in my mind.

Ratleader

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since 2003-01-23

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Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

2 posted 2003-09-13 12:50 PM

What a ride! Excellent piece of poetry here, just a pleasure to read from beginning to end. You are hereby declared the queen of tactile imagery....

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passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

3 posted 2003-09-13 01:40 AM

it's good to take risks sometimes

icebox
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since 2003-05-03

Posts 4383
in the shadows

4 posted 2003-09-13 02:01 AM

Sometimes you've just got to bet it all.

Great writing! Thanks for sharing it.

Local Rebel
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since 1999-12-21

Posts 5767
Southern Abstentia

5 posted 2003-09-13 02:07 AM

the water's fine

agree with Rat... very tactile

Ericc
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since 2003-01-31

Posts 4178

6 posted 2003-09-13 10:40 AM

Beautiful.
Eric

alisa
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since 2003-08-20

Posts 70
Florida

7 posted 2003-09-14 12:05 PM

amazing....

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