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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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~*~ Feeling my way through a dark tunnel falling between a warm rush and a whispered hush water glistens while running down a stream optical illusions unseen with the naked eye defining lines etched in glass. Breathing deep between breaths skimming along the edge unknown embraced by the trickle down effect filling my needs with a clarity cuts both ways and holds me under. Brushing up rough and smooth carries over distant dreams rippling beneath the surface as a single tear escapes and pulls me back a hopeful light seeps through the cracks. Exposing reality in the silence voices echo from the past releasing my emotions in full aware my love has run it's course at last. ~and I can breathe~ |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Wow -- a wild ride! ....and a well written one, like absolutely everything of yours....thanks for the lift! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Now now, I should be thanking you for the lift, and I do! Ed~  |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Wow! My breathing was affected as your words threw me through the black tunnel, under water and finally into the light again. Incredible imagery. Breathing freedom with you. Love and hugs. Margherita |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Wow....guess we are all taking our "breathing" seriously to-day. Great write Bluesygirl. hugs, Chris |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lori...Breathing here, with this pondering, deep and layered lovey poem. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thank you ladies....your replies are so meaningful, and they please me to no end. I just don't know what to say sometimes. Please know, you warm my heart in the very best way. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Brushing up rough and smooth carries over distant dreams rippling beneath the surface as a single tear escapes and pulls me back a hopeful light seeps through the cracks. Exposing reality in the silence voices echo from the past releasing my emotions in full aware my love has run it's course at last. ~and I can breathe~ Lori, I was holding my breath with this one. I'm sure glad that you could breathe at the end. LOL Whew!!  Hugs  Ethel |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
I'd say wow..but this goes beyond that  insanity is not a crime |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Breathing is so very sweet, isnt it Bluesy? *smile* xxoo |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Breathing deep between breaths skimming along the edge unknown so soft, and tender...as only you can.....enjoying you... Lauren~ The way you move me |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thanks to you all, and hugs~ |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
darn! thought I might get to do mouth to mouth!  |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Very funny! Thanks Reb~ |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Lori...This is just simply pure release of emotions and beautiful all at the same time. Thanks for sharing...Paul "To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you" |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Paul, thank you kindly! It helps to let go, now then, if I can make it fly I will be all set!! |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
Builds to a gasp of air! |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
This is most definitely a keeper! A great write! We live an' learn from our mistakes |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thank you very much Krawdad and EagleOne. Say goodnight Gracey! |
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