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.....Shallow Moments....
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.....Shallow Moments.... |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach 
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 . . . You kept me wading in the shallows unaware While you frolicked over your head clad only in your addictive charm Leaving it up to me to save you when you had swallowed too much living. Dog paddling my way through summer playthings and tasteless refreshments - Terrified of the bottomless, blackened temptation pool swirling around you like a giant sea snake. I can't touch bottom and won't turn back. Take a deep breath Chris Believe Hallelujah !! Hope floats ! . . . Chris Barker August 2003 ~~~~ |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Leaving it up to me to save you when you had swallowed too much living. Those are such cool lines Chris~ I really enjoyed your poem, and the ending especially. I think we're floating somewhere close together. Hugs~ |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Great write. I am impressed. Love, Margherita |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
I can't touch bottom and won't turn back. Take a deep breath Chris Believe Hallelujah !! Hope floats ! . Whoah, Chris...too awesome! Can I add my name to yours in this extraordinary write... for I know your words, particularly this week. Smiling so large at you! Patricia |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Bluesygirl, Margherita, & Patricia, Thankyou for reading and commenting. hugs  |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Hope floats'' I keep trying to believe that....sometimes it seems harder then at other times......hugsss L~ The way you move me |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Good God, you must get out of my head . . . it is evil in there I tell you . . . evil *shaking head* xxoo |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Each little line had such impact... I was about to copy one then another then I found myself saying the poem stands alone. Each line breaths each line, connected. Well done! |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Lauren - keep on believing. thankyou. hugs Sue - I thought you were in mine! lol. Thankyou for reading and commenting. Karilea - thankyou dear poetess - your comments make me feel so good! hugs. |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Hi Chris ~~ wonderful poem and if you have no objection, I'd like to forward it to my sister. There is always HOPE! Hugs sweet friend, Marti |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Marti - by all means! Please send it to your sister - I would be honoured. Thankyou so much for reading and commenting. hugs! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Wonderful thoughts here Chris.. and yes...Hope Floats. ~Hugs, love and miss ya, Teed~ ~The breeze that kissed you on the face, |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Thankyou sister of mine. Glad you're back. luv ya! |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Never let anyone else determine how you should stand or where you should be, whoever suggested keeping you in the shallows is obviously a fool and is forgiven though I only hope that person knows how to find hope within! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Chris, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Aww sweet Noah, thankyou. It was a long time ago and everything is fine now. hugs! |
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Jason Lyle Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438With my darkling |
A great write. Jason |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Thankyou so much Jason. |
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