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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho 
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how exactly then if I write you are you more than vellum gathering dust in a file’s cabinet sour sharing spaces with discarded things that only I’d encounter where the are of who you are is so unerasably etched like some apocryphal billboard waiting to tiptoe like a playful child into a soul yearning for the what of what if I were able to draw you close and type you into verse write you onto this vellum still wet with the what that could’ve been how exactly then would I write you when all I know is the silent plume of miss Speaking of ghosts, wouldn't you know here comes mine again... |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
This speaks volumes.Again I love the form of your writes. amgelblueyes |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
I wasn't sure about this... but a good critique is always helpful. lucky/dale |
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SharaRose Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2501Somewhere out there~ |
Oh what a heartbreaker this is. I'm off for that box of kleenex. Gotta go... :'( SharaRose @-->-- Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer! |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
wow...I can't remember reading anything like this from you before..but it is a keeper  M |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
lucky...you would do it just the way you did...with love and a certain ache. (for the reader as well) Hugs! |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
thank you all so much... I wasn't so sure about the "plume of miss" I mean I could see it... but I just wasn't sure if you pip's would. dale |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
how exactly then would I write you when all I know is the silent plume of miss So much ache and yearning... missing does overwhelm everything, doesn't it? *S* |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
 I don't know how you do it, but I'm glad you do |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
lucky its so good to read your unique and special poetry again...words and presentation both leave a lasting impression. Well done poet sir. Say Hello to Rosemary for me. "How could I stand here with you and not be moved by you." |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Lucky~ Sweet poet ... you touch the sense of all that is right with poetry~ 'how exactly then would I write you when all I know is the silent plume of miss' Just EXQUISITELY beautiful !!! *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Ringo
since 2003-02-20
Posts 3684Saluting with misty eyes |
This is truly a great piece of work... And the fact that you can put it into shape is even more amazing. Every time I try, it turns into senseless rambling even worse than usual. Outstanding job, Sir. We are all equal but we’re individually different |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
shades of blush... I wasn't going to make my debut until this fall as posting takes a lot of time. There is only so much time for the work around here and no matter how hot it may seem winter is coming and it again will all fall back to an easy roll. So until then,,,, I'll post what I can. Love you all. dale |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
 ~With a heart full of gratitude~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
very beautifully penned and excellently presented... regards sudhir |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
Awesome...just awesome and appropriate for me today. I could ramble my thoughts this poem brought to me...but you wouldn't want that. LOL Well, because indeed I have been rambling on so much today. So, I will tell you that your writing has provided with so much...and I going back again for another read. I believe this is the first time I have read your work. I must say I have missed some excellent writing. I will be looking for you, Mr. Lucky. Patricia |
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S Arthur Grey Senior Member
since 2001-03-19
Posts 719woven by a poet's loom |
"the silent plume . . ." It works, Sir, indeed it works. s.a.g. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
were able to draw you close and type you into verse write you onto this vellum still wet with the what that could’ve been how exactly then would I write you when all I know is the silent plume of miss Lucky, this is so beautiful, I don't even know how to reply...the poem and the form. It's sad, yet absolutely beautiful. Thank you, Sir, for sharing this with us. Hugs  Ethel |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
do I hear the bleu pages calling... you guys are great... probably all my neighbors. My best to you all and thank you once again. dale |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Wonderful to see you posting again. : ) Just saying hello and complimenting you on this beautiful piece. Dear John, |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
Sometimes your words are so eloquent, they catch in my throat as I read. That business of missing - ah, yes. This is so poignantly haunting... And, Janet Marie - thank you, and hi to you too! . The spiritual wind that holds survivors aloft, plants the seeds from which bloom new hope ... R.J.G. |
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