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Kaoru
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where the wild flowers grow

0 posted 2003-08-02 10:38 PM



Haunting whispers,
psychic rain.
Forward eyes I
had a vision.

I was once a fish
inhaling sand.

© Copyright 2003 Meghan Armitage - All Rights Reserved
Aenimal
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the ass-end of space
1 posted 2003-08-02 10:48 PM


goddamn...yah..that sums it
Match
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2 posted 2003-08-02 11:50 PM


Nice one!

I wear my crown of thorns
on my liar's chair
full of broken thoughts
I cannot repair


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3 posted 2003-08-03 01:22 AM


Gritty . . .
inkedgoddess
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4 posted 2003-08-03 07:21 AM


i was once a fish, now i am breathing with the trees.......
vlraynes
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Somewhere... out there...
5 posted 2003-08-12 11:26 PM



This is different...I like.

"My friends are my estate."
~Emily Dickinson

icebox
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in the shadows
6 posted 2003-08-13 12:14 PM


I like this a lot.

It took my thoughts away and put me somewhere else; how it did that, I don't know.


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Riding
7 posted 2003-08-13 01:13 AM


I love the wording you used in this!!

There's nothing like a good fight with a horse to put your problems into perspective

inkedgoddess
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8 posted 2003-08-13 06:44 AM


the fish is in the sand
and the sand is in the fish
its all so simple, why don't more people get it?

Susan Caldwell
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9 posted 2003-08-13 09:29 AM


Suffocating...uh huh.

Loved it!

Susan

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displaced
10 posted 2003-08-13 12:42 PM


awesome!

gave me chills

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11 posted 2003-08-13 01:07 PM


another thought to ponder...good one...i liked
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12 posted 2003-08-13 01:22 PM


Been there, did that.....choked for a while, then learned that I could be a grunion....

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13 posted 2003-08-13 04:28 PM


about tht ecomment you left me on my poem, i always thought that if we are someones dream then everytime they woke up we one of us died, and everytime they fell alseep they created a new dream lol i know i know i'm weird lol.

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14 posted 2003-08-13 04:55 PM


fabulously penned,,,

     


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15 posted 2003-08-13 07:11 PM


enjoyed
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In a corporeal internship...
16 posted 2003-08-13 08:50 PM


...I guess there are worse things to inhale...  
A jarring image though.

-MVS

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