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Honeybee
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0 posted 2003-08-02 10:18 PM



Letting Superman Go

Pitied man,
I held you once
in high regard,
your pedestal built from mortar of tears
on innocent wings, forgave the sting
for red cape that only my eyes could see.

You were a flawed super-hero
and still, I saw hope,
a poor imitation of Superman,
and yet, you held my adore,
a perfect imperfection through blind eyes, unknowing;
reality ignored
that you were really my tormentor,
the monster under my bed.

I wasn't supposed to take care of you
you were supposed to take care of me
and guide me and love me
unconditionally.
I was the one who had to
grow up too fast
in need of an idol, a friend -
one that cannot last.
I needed someone to believe in,
for that someone to believe in me.

But, you yelled and yanked and hit
and emotionally drained this little girl,
a tragedy that even Superman
could fall before kryptonite.

You let me down, Daddy
when you told me
that I was your hate
when all I ever did was love you.
You bruised this little girl's soul
and now she’s grown up
and doesn’t believe
in miracles anymore.

You were my Superman,
a fantasy to a child
trying to find the good
in a man filled with darkness;
a second chance to a child
trying to pump life
into a dead man’s body
leaving mine cold and worn
well before my years.

Take these tears
I won't cry them anymore,
take this fear
It’s controlled me for too long.
Take this shame, the blame
keep it with the pain you inflicted.
Take this rage,
you deserve it most of all,
take the silence, the loss,
take these eyes from your hell.

Superman, I held you once in high regard.
Daddy, you let me down.

By Melissa Long-Monette



Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world!

© Copyright 2003 Melissa P. Long-Monette - All Rights Reserved
Riley
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in the pouring rain
1 posted 2003-08-02 10:20 PM


wow, this was a very touching poem.....got a lump in my throat thats for sure.....loved the write...the topic is a hard one


riley

* the pouring rain kisses my lips with innocence as you look into my eyes *

Aenimal
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the ass-end of space
2 posted 2003-08-02 10:27 PM


easter bunny, Santa, parents, god..in that order. You know how much i know this one M but i couldn't have written it like this. Amazing. on a sidenote superman sucks anyway..what a lame character and that costume..buddy get with the trends already.
Janet Marie
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3 posted 2003-08-03 12:09 PM


hard to crit such honest, kicked in chest poetry... You found the perfect metaphor to exorsize your demons with poetess Melis.

As always your poetry reaches out and effects the reader and impresses as well.

"How could I stand here with you and not be moved by you."

LH

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
4 posted 2003-08-03 12:24 PM


Melissa,
More himself than you. Unbeknown he created a buterfly.

1slick_lady
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standing on a shadow's lace
5 posted 2003-08-03 12:30 PM


YOU
are my hero tho

passing shadows
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displaced
6 posted 2003-08-03 01:06 PM


even daddies fall

never put mine up on a pedestal because he was never there

good write Mel

Local Rebel
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7 posted 2003-08-03 01:23 PM


I wish everyone could have had my father -- makes me appreciate him all the more...


Ron
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8 posted 2003-08-03 02:12 PM


Indeed. Amazing how the same metaphor can be used to tell such a very different story.
JamesMichael
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9 posted 2003-08-03 03:39 PM


A beautiful piece from your damaged heart...hope good things are happening for you now...James
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