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Letting Superman Go (a tribute to my father)
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Letting Superman Go (a tribute to my father) |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia 
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I put on your shoes When I was five And my toes didn’t quite Make it past the tongue I tried to keep your stride When I was twenty But your pace Was always too Brisk for me To keep up I tried to wear your faith Like a shirt that didn’t fit I wore your name like a bow-tie Parted my hair the way you showed me When I was eight Sat in your favorite chair When you weren’t looking Drove your car high into the air Slammed it into a soybean field And never told you about it Took the lid off your pepper shaker On April Fools Day Stopped scribbling fancy art And drew those straight Straight engineering lines With your best number 2 drafting pencil And maybe It was the day When I woke up And realized I wasn’t you And didn’t have to be Maybe it was that day When I first grieved It was hard to watch you Not be you anymore Hard to see superman Fall before kryptonite Like a rag I’ve missed you my friend My father My hero My idol I’ll miss you more But, I’ve had you a long time < !signature--> How much more grievous are the consequences of anger than the causes of it. -Marcus Aurelius [This message has been edited by Local Rebel (edited 01-29-2000).] |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This is beautiful, LR... we have to savor every moment... they're all too few. [This message has been edited by suthern (edited 01-28-2000).] |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
It's funny how alot of us, when we're young, look at our fathers like a Superman.....And, in many ways they were....and when ya find out they're really "Clark Kent"...and only human....and they're gone.....it makes ya think about all those "Super" things they could do....and how Super they were to you and your growth........This is wonderful Hawk...... |
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fc Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 130 |
just beautiful my friend, perfect tribute  |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
Yep Toe -- and the best I could ever hope to be is Batman |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
And that's Bad?....Good Grief man! Batman's good!.....Look at me?....I ended up being a friggin' Toerag! |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Very beautiful....A wonderful tribute to your father LR..... |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Sweetheart: The thoughts will keep living.. HUSG Memories give you the power to collect roses in the winter... |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Yep, but really, they'll always be Superman in our hearts! Denise |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
Thanks everyone -- and Toe -- we know that rag of yours is really a cape old man..! |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Rebel...what a wonderful poem. Great tribute to one who will always be a hero in your book |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Excellent writing, Rebel, and a worthy topic. |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
LR, my Daddy is and always will be my hero. Jeez, I'm almost 30 and I still call him Daddy......(or "hey POP") You brought tears to my eyes. Guess I better get off the computer and call him....... Thanks! -SEA |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
Thanks hootie (or should that be hottie? lol) deer and sea... I very much appreciate your thoughts and comments... Just to put this all in context for those of you who don't know me my father has been bravely fighting cancer since the fall of 98 but, alas, sometimes there are better alternatives than a cure... he was/is a proud member of America's greatest generation and I never wrote him a poem in all the years I walked in his shadow.. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Rebel- Admiring greatly the tenderness in this tribute from your heart. A victory won within the son Son to father, so well done. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Rebel, you mayn't have written him a poem until now, but from these words, one can see that your love for your father is as poetry. Thank you for sharing this part of you. I smiled all through the reading (o: Claire |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
Touching poem, LR. |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
This poem touched my heart - your words to describe your father could very easily describe mine - I miss my Father every day.. Thank you for sharing. Roniece |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Hawkman - I like to think I can put words together and make a poem, and thereby claim to be a poet. You show that there is a lot more to it than that. This is a terrific piece of writing, old man. |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
The sensitivity and caring in this one shows us your true heart sweetie!! Hang in there LR...here's a hug for ya!!!! hug!!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Great images here! Thanks for giving us a peek inside of you and your dad, too. Corinne |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
This one brought tears. So very well written. Liz |
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JTF Member
since 1999-08-09
Posts 319France |
A beautiful tribute Hawke ... and I ditto Rainbow, your dad will live in your heart and thoughts. |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
Wow -- I didn't expect this one to stay up all weekend! Many thanks to all of you have read and responded it is very thoughtful and appreciated. |
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JTF Member
since 1999-08-09
Posts 319France |
Wow -- I didn't expect this one to stay up all weekend! Quite powerful these Viagra pills ain't they Hawke ? ...  |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
*Catching my breath*...First I was very touched by this wonderful poem. I feel the same way about my father. Then I was laughing so hard tears were streaming down my face. JFT....Rotflmao Thankyou so much gentlemen....rarely do I find men who can send me on such a rollercoaster of emotion in minutes. Well done!!  |
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Birdsong Member
since 2000-02-07
Posts 105London, England |
I just found this astonishing poem. Can hardly type through the lump in my keyboard. So beautiful it hurts just to read it. Thanks. |
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Abby Junior Member
since 2001-08-12
Posts 12Texas |
Obviously I haven't been around much (hence the date of this posting and the lateness of my reply). I like your style so I decided to run a search for more of your work. The title of this particular one grabbed my heart so naturally I had to read it. You recently replied to a posting I did in CA titled *My Greatest Love* so you know we have alot in common on this subject. That poem being written for my father as well. It's a hard thing to have loved in such a way and then to have it taken from you. Very unlike a love for someone else, or so in my opinion. You know what I mean. Thanks for posting this. It has a lot of emotion. Wonderful job! Abby |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
so big feet run in the family? love you! |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
This is beautiful beyond words although I cannot relate since I had the complete opposite relationship with my father. But, nonetheless, this is powerful, very touching. Luckily, I had a mother who sounded like your father was with you...that's what gives me strength. I'm glad that Ron left this link in my poem...indeed this is a perfect metaphor ion any level. And I am sure that your father has read this from heaven, sounds cliche I know, but it is a comforting thought isn't it? Melissa~ Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Dang. I never read this one before. Loved the open tenderness in this piece, Reb. It's amazing what these archives hold in store for us. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
very touching write here |
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