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eor
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since 2002-09-26

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blues & greys

0 posted 2003-06-29 12:35 PM

A smile behind a veil
I know you will still be here.

I won't say a single word
But when you wake I'll know what to say,
I'll present you with the option
               of a kiss
                  or a rose
                       or maybe I'll look into your eyes and give you both
If I can watch you.

Radiance exudes from you
I am not whole without you

There are just three words
That can make all of these obsolete

Can I tell you?

While you are sleeping

Kaoru

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since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

1 posted 2003-06-29 12:40 PM

"I'll present you with the option
               of a kiss
                  or a rose
                       or maybe I'll look into your eyes and give you both
If I can watch you."

Really enjoyed this

Thanks for sharing it.

exhale
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since 2003-06-13

Posts 646
Alberta,Canada

2 posted 2003-06-29 12:43 PM

wow..i think this expressed so much emotion i just adore it.
great write

Ratleader

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3 posted 2003-06-29 10:32 AM

If you can't say three, say one.... "Yes."

She will know.

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Bonnie j
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since 2003-06-27

Posts 1588
Ohio

4 posted 2003-06-29 10:48 AM

Beautiful words. When you watch someone sleep.The lines of stress or anger or of life's emotions disappear into complete peace.The lines fade into a peaceful glow.
Keep those wonderous words of poetry a comin' and I'll keep reading.
Bonnie j aka Bon-Bon

eor
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since 2002-09-26

Posts 959
blues & greys

5 posted 2003-06-29 01:37 PM

thank you all for you'r wonderful words of encourgement. i usually post in dark, but i have found my muse...

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6 posted 2003-06-30 11:49 AM

And nice having a muse you don't have to choke things out of, eh?....so it doesn't come out as Dark....

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passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

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displaced

7 posted 2003-06-30 12:38 PM

beautiful write

suthern

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since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

8 posted 2003-06-30 05:03 PM

I am not whole without you

Beautiful write, eor... and if she knows this... she hears even what you don't say. *S*

quatro
Member

since 2003-04-29

Posts 392
Galveston, Texas

9 posted 2003-06-30 06:05 PM

I really liked this. Thanks for sharing with us her in Open.

quatro

Magnus

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since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

10 posted 2003-06-30 06:57 PM

eor, your muse has helped you a great deal.
This piece is delicate and passionate as
well. Excellent words in this piece.

eor
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since 2002-09-26

Posts 959
blues & greys

11 posted 2003-06-30 10:36 PM

thank all of you, my insperation continues...i'll be posting soon...

Ladybug
Member

since 2003-06-17

Posts 236
Massachusetts

12 posted 2003-07-02 07:53 PM

Beautiful poem! Glad you found your muse... Mine is starting to return. I have always found it easier to write Dark poetry (especially during my depressing college years) but I'm trying to lighten up, so to speak. Enjoy your work!

Every new beginning comes from some other beginning's end...

eor
Senior Member

since 2002-09-26

Posts 959
blues & greys

13 posted 2003-07-02 09:13 PM

thanks, i hope your muse returns, but dark is good as well, look forward to see some of your 'lighter' stuff:-)

"in a past life i was a woodcarver's knife: the sharpend blade of a wood cutter, the eldest son of the chief's brother: a maker of drums"

Ladybug
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since 2003-06-17

Posts 236
Massachusetts

14 posted 2003-07-02 09:51 PM

Thanks, Eor. At least while I'm waiting for my muse to catch up with me, I'll have your poems to keep me going!

Every new beginning comes from some other beginning's end...

IndigoEve
Member

since 2003-01-10

Posts 279
Etched in the illusion of time

15 posted 2003-07-02 10:20 PM

Thank you for posting this! It helped my muse write today's poem. Overall, 'twas an absolutely eloquent and beautiful write.

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

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California

16 posted 2003-07-02 10:44 PM

eor....charming and tenderly written....much enjoyed!

garysgirl

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since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

17 posted 2003-07-02 10:58 PM

eor, this is so beautiful. Thank you for sharing it with us.
You know, I have trouble understanding the Dark Poetry sometimes, but I had no trouble whatsoever understanding this poem. It is absolutely beautiful.

Hugs

Ethel

Duncan
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since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

18 posted 2003-07-02 11:08 PM

"There are just three words
That can make all of these obsolete

Can I tell you?

While you are sleeping"

One of life's best moments. Enjoyed Matt...

eor
Senior Member

since 2002-09-26

Posts 959
blues & greys

19 posted 2003-07-03 03:39 PM

thank you, all of you, you bring a smile to my face, and that means more than you know...:-)

"in a past life i was a woodcarver's knife: the sharpend blade of a wood cutter, the eldest son of the chief's brother: a maker of drums"

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