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Playing Tag With The Spirits of The Dead (a duet with icebox)
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Playing Tag With The Spirits of The Dead (a duet with icebox) |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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Breathe the whisper’s urgency plays cello on my skin; my fingers gain fluidity, following the note I dance behind the lidded eye, cat eyes hiding in mystique, afraid that he will find me out... trying not to sigh. Sigh the chords’ vibrato floods canyons in my soul; I’m cleansed of trivialities, shedding my false pride I cry from deep within my dreams, childlike yearnings from the nights, screaming silently hiding need... trying not to drown. Follow guide the burst of lung, surfacing my need there is some serenity in the water's play of light-- even dead eventually float atop the tide... say there is some hope for me, embryonic cling of vine, tendrils of life’s gravity, I am in search of sky... Throttle breath clear like a child, purify vision softly releasing all hate, mind the four quarters of earth-- passively open Heaven’s gate, go dancing with death... freely making decisions, rule without fame, believing sheltering only my fate, I am in search of truth... |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Awesomely written, you both complemented each other very well. And the bookies said it couldn't be done....WRONG! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
AHA! Somehow I knew that this would happen. Really, very nice indeed. (An aside to icebox (You can run, but cannot hide....From Karenity, that is)) |
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Edder Senior Member
since 2003-04-02
Posts 671 |
i'm with Ed...been waitin on this...anxiously waiting...wasn't disappointed either! [This message has been edited by Edder (06-28-2003 01:45 PM).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Popping in to say thanks to you all, and especially to icebox, for his patience and generosity. (I really WAS nervous about this one!) You sir, are truly a gentleman and a gentle man. I thank you for tolerating the presence of a tse0tse fly for a day.  I enjoyed working with you very much, and would love to duet again anytime. Hugs to all, with my gratitude. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Jesus this is amazing! God, the two of you together writing can be compared to Earth meets Sky . . . Brilliant beautiful flowing perfection and blew me away truly with the message God, this is brilliant Excellent job guys xxoo |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Breathe the whisper’s urgency plays cello on my skin; my fingers gain fluidity, following the note I dance behind the lidded eye, cat eyes hiding in mystique, afraid that he will find me out... trying not to sigh. OOOHHH, mysterious.....  [This message has been edited by garysgirl (06-28-2003 03:02 PM).] |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I don't care who wrote what... what I DO care about is that this appealed to me very much! |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
Wow.. Perfect combination.. Perfect write. Enjoyed.  |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Breathe Sigh Follow guide Throttle breath In search of truth Wonderful work, you two! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Follow guide the burst of lung, surfacing my need there is some serenity in the water's play of light-- even dead eventually float atop the tide... say there is some hope for me, embryonic cling of vine, tendrils of life’s gravity, I am in search of sky... Throttle breath clear like a child, purify vision softly releasing all hate, mind the four quarters of earth-- passively open Heaven’s gate, go dancing with death... freely making decisions, rule without fame, believing sheltering only my fate, I am in search of truth... ================================ This is so cool and so deeeeeeep... I am so digging these duets... I just cane from reading LP and LWs duet over in Poetic Haven and then find this outstanding pairing of pens.. say there is some hope for me, embryonic cling of vine, tendrils of life’s gravity, I am in search of sky... Throttle breath clear like a child, purify vision softly releasing all hate, mind the four quarters of earth-- passively open Heaven’s gate, HOW COOL is that.!! the imagery, personification and sybolism makes this haunting write... Bravo you two.!!! All I can feel is this distance between you and me. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
A duet that touches some deep chords. Two great poets united, my compliments! Love, Margherita |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
You two really flow together...great write !! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Am excellent collaboration.. well done both of you. Maree oh am keeping this.  |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Breathe...Trying not to sigh Sigh....Trying not to drown Follow Guide....in search of sky Throttle Breath....in search of truth Ohhhhhh....that is brilliant!! Susan C. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Fantastic write take a bow folks |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
what happened to "time restraints" oh well, I'm glad you two have gotten together, that was fantastic. I wish the capitan was here to read this, unfortunately you have him tied up in the attic  I said I'm going to buy a gun and start a war, |
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