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Analysis Of Rationalizations
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Analysis Of Rationalizations |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Smoke twisted up from The Cig you had lit and left to burn While your lips expounded on the latest harm Done to the idea of sanity and rational thought By someone I didn’t know And reminded me of how When lit you too would consume all the air Until only ashes remained. Freud was a fool In love with his own anatomy you once told me So he wrote all his drivel to rationalize And put in place the women of the day Just another man driven to keep the fair sex In their place…. I remembered that conversation As you were telling me about The things someone had said to you And how they were meant. Funny to me then… To draw a parallel in your estimation of Freud. Jung might say your animus was speaking But you would question that as again someone labeling In stereotypical fashion to cubbyhole what they do not understand. Your logic at times is impeccable. Your Heart on the other hand seems obfuscated. “Yeah, people are a disappointment.” I offer, and light my own curl of smoke. I wonder if you ever want a hand to touch you Someone to be tender in a Monet of pain Or to comfort when the Picasso of stress Tears at the canvas of your psyche…. I’ve never seen that side of you… But imagine you’d bay in primal screams If you ever let someone reach the edges of your heart. “Another round, barkeep.” I’m too far from the couch to analyze anymore And I don't appear to be anywhere close to touching you. |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
cool piece |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
The dendrites are wriggling as I read. Some people fear the movement, fear the travel of nature's electricity, fear the consequences of being charged up emotionally. I like to listen to my own inner spirit, and give only the barest credence to Jung, Freud, or anyone else who isn't trapped inside my body and soul. Maybe that's why I am nuts? LOL [This message has been edited by Midnitesun (06-23-2003 12:39 PM).] |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
SAVED!!!---and might I just add that I believe Jung was right about her!--and that she was right about Freud!  Huggums, EA [This message has been edited by Earth Angel (06-23-2003 12:36 PM).] |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
I can never say this enough i'm sooo in love  the way you have with words is just hmm wow!? If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. [This message has been edited by Ceinwyn (06-23-2003 12:50 PM).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
And reminded me of how When lit you too would consume all the air Until only ashes remained. -------------------------------- oh damn..I wish I had wrote that!!! bout time you got back in here ya slacker  I heard some rumor bout a day off??? hope ya went fishing  |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Hi Ron...lots of thinking in this...made my head spin. I was married to a shrink for many years...he analized me to death, and therefore was able to keep a professional distance from his own emotions. Was a hard way to live for both of us. Enjoyed the reality of this scene...and the ending stanza..perfect! |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Brad.. thank you sir... appreciated. Midnight... listening to the inner self is a good way to know what is right for you... in this case the inner self was listened to, but spoke a language of the surface.. the depths are there, but they seem to be well hidden indeed. EA..(chuckling) Freud was indeed a character and one I will not defend... Jung.. while appealing in some ways and makes sense on certain levels, I'm not sure I believe either... about her however... yeah.. I think he would have been correct in that statement. Ceinwyn... In love huh? ( chuckling) dear one... you flatter me.. thank you... but I think the words are what you love, not the old coot who writes them... JM... yeah a day off... and need to burn some more before i lose them. Fishing??? been so long I have forgetten what that was like..LOL.. had a list of chore to finish and the weather wasn't bad so made some prgoress on them and now back in the office, wishing I could have slept in this morning... Many thanks to you all... for the nice words and taking time to leave them. It is greatly appreciated.. Martie..lol.. yeah I am sure that made a lot of difficult and interesting times for you. I just have the curse for having read and studied too much years ago...so now I analyze things and people too much it would seem. Glad you enjoyed.. [This message has been edited by Cpat Hair (06-23-2003 01:12 PM).] |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
booyaa!! the man slam dunks it.... 'when lit you too would consume all the air until only ashes remained' I think I dated her! bukowski who? |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
yea thats what I meant If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
Ron, Is it any wonder I feel such embarrassment when you read my solo efforts? Not at all your fault, my good man. To know my limitations and accept the truth...not such a bad thing. And I indeed have time to grow...to learn, while all the while knowing I will never reach your level. Only a great mind such as yours could write as this. Now carry on, good Captain. Bring to me your wisdom and insight for it will settle in and of it I will rise. Patricia |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
quote: So you take a day or two off, then come home to wrench us back into reality... no complaint here...just feeling the words... [This message has been edited by Sunshine (06-23-2003 01:41 PM).] |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
LR.. lol.. thanks for the words bud...and as for dating her..I'm sorry... could cause emotional trauma that required professional help to overcome... might want to get the oil checked and make sure she didn't drain a quart or two... Cein... yeah I knew what you meant... just picking on you..lol... I'm bad that way... teasing... been told I was a pain more than once for sure...Patricia... hey now..no need to be talking that way... I just write..and nothing I write is so good or so much better than what anyone else does.. you continue to write and write for the reasons inside..and quit trying to compare yourself to anyone else.. lol.. we are all unique.. now..thank you for the nice words.. Sunshine... reality... you mean it stopped while I was away? [This message has been edited by Cpat Hair (06-23-2003 01:45 PM).] |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Sort of...for me. Got embroiled in my novel Sunday and my characters took me far and away and left behind about 4,000 words. yep...this wrenched me back. But my two ladies made me promise to get back to them, even exacting a second promise that this ah, project, would get finished this summer. I think I'm going to have to follow the sun...  |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
a quart or two of oil? she fried my transmission  |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
yeppers, this is real, honestly painfully real.....powerful writing my friend |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
thanks JB... you know the real...so I take it as a great compliment... thank you |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Oh my! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I wonder if you ever want a hand to touch you Someone to be tender in a Monet of pain Or to comfort when the Picasso of stress Tears at the canvas of your psyche…. I’ve never seen that side of you… But imagine you’d bay in primal screams If you ever let someone reach the edges of your heart. Oh, my... *S* Now I know why it was so good to see you posting again today... *S* Like this much, I do. *S* |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Oh, the way you paint a scene -- Ratleader is a fan. You've a touch that's so original and yet so very valid. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
OK Ron, if you are an old coot....errrr, where does that put Moi? (Magnus exits the stage, was supposed to go right and went left instead. Setting off the fire alarm when his head broke the glass) Excellent write, boy could this poem go in a couple of directions... |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
The ones made of asbestos are the ones who can burn the brightest...one only has to decide if it is worth wasting the match... Like your style, senor.... |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"I’m too far from the couch to analyze anymore And I don't appear to be anywhere close to touching you." Not much I could add to that...  |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Ron: you do know women well now dont you? This was beautiful and creative in the way you presented it quite amazing actually but the content so bittersweet . . .if you ever let someone reach the edges of your heart . . . I think I know this person . . . xxoo |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
speechless here...sorry |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Came back to look for this one. You KNEW this one would strike a chord... A very WISE man told me, not too long ago, that in regards to Jung: "Leave that stuff alone, Jung will drive ya nuts." I still say Freud will make ya walk. But I guess it's the destination, eh?  Love this, but you knew that I would... |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
Jeeze, the title . . . I don't know about that, but, "Someone to be tender in a Monet of pain" could have its own title. Enjoyed Kraw' |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
what is rational anyway? Good job. I said I'm going to buy a gun and start a war, |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
I love this!! I swear I was part of that conversation - it was so vivid ! I really enjoy reading your work - you are definitely in my top 10 poets! Bravo ! Roniece Dawson-Bruce |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
I wonder if you ever want a hand to touch you Someone to be tender in a Monet of pain Or to comfort when the Picasso of stress Tears at the canvas of your psyche…. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Deep thoughts going on here. Deb |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"Your logic at times is impeccable. Your Heart on the other hand seems obfuscated. “Yeah, people are a disappointment.” I offer, and light my own curl of smoke. I wonder if you ever want a hand to touch you Someone to be tender in a Monet of pain Or to comfort when the Picasso of stress Tears at the canvas of your psyche…. I’ve never seen that side of you… But imagine you’d bay in primal screams If you ever let someone reach the edges of your heart. “Another round, barkeep.” I’m too far from the couch to analyze anymore And I don't appear to be anywhere close to touching you." Needed a fix... |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
it looks like everyone has a similar reaction to this one, Capt we can't seem to get enough of it and don't need anyone to analyze the 'why' |
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