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If I Knew, I Swear I'd Try To Be Sane
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If I Knew, I Swear I'd Try To Be Sane |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows 
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Who talked to god the last time he was in town? Did he ask about me or check if I was around? Lots of bumper stickers say he's been found; was he really lost, or just being a clown? Who talked to god the last time he was in town? I'm not sure right now if my soul's been saved. Last night it was not redemption it craved. Walking Bleeker Street, my brain was enslaved by a body I do believe misbehaved. I'm not sure right now if my soul's been saved. Do you think perhaps he's got a seat on his train; one I could pay for with what's left of my brain? I'm good at stories, should I try to explain; or are my hopes powder and it's starting to rain? Do you think perhaps he's got a seat on his train? So who talked to god the last time he was in town? I keep on praying but he's not making a sound. I'm getting older and still screwing around; I'm pretty sure I know where my soul is bound. So who talked to god the last time he was in town? ©2003 by icebox |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Icebox, Well, this reads smoothly...an interesting write as is especially the title. Hugs, Pat  [This message has been edited by regards2you (05-15-2003 07:10 PM).] |
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Joe Houck Member
since 2001-04-23
Posts 324california |
Icebox this is honestly the best poem I've read in a while. I really liked this. I myself can't say I've seen him around town but maybe I'm just looking in the wrong places. These words are something I can see myself writing. It felt like I was looking into a mirror. I can't say enough. Good stuff Joe |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
He said for you to be ready, he'd stop back by next Tuesday.  |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I talk to him quite often, but as of yet I haven't heard him reply... I enjoyed your words M |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
regards2you ~ Thank you for reading it. The title came from a verse I eliminated. For me this was one of a "type" of poem that builds in my head and then comes out all at once. This one came with music, but I don't write music. The music was tinny syncopated piano cross threaded with a muted trumpet blues riff. Joe Houck ~ Well, I am glad you enjoyed it. Who knows, maybe it really was your poem and it simply landed in my head. *smile* Thank you for your comments. Midnitesun ~ Cool!!! I have a whole weekend to party my ass off. Thanks for telling me!!! nakdthoughts ~ Hmmm...so, should I worry if I do hear an answer? *grin* |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
good stuff! |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Thank you for reading. I am glad you enjoyed it. |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
The subject of God and the questions we ask are so very well formed in your lines, Icebox. In my humble opinion, God speaks to us in so many ways but we just don't hear him - it's not his fault. It's no coincidence that you should be thinking of him. The next stage is believing and after that you will hear him ... in your "gut" (intuition)! Listen to that for that is how he leads. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
ice: brilliant write here and well . . . I have never heard from him personally (the voices I hear . . . trust me they are not Him) lol but I do see him in other ways . . . like the flowers I plant - the sun shining -my son . . . and even in things which most would chalk off to coincidence. I am far from a religious person - entirely spiritual at best but this write breathes all of what society has done and is to blame for . . . nice job ice xxoo |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Honeybunch ~ Thank you for reading my poem. I appreciate your comments. My thoughts on god are varied. I can not even take seriously the concept of a god that has a specific gender. I do believe that most humans have a basic need for a structured belief system on which to rely when the day to day business of life gets overwhelming. In that frame of reference, the common definitions of god work fine and provide avenues for communication. I have learned in painful ways that when I try to explain my beliefs, the most common reaction is negative, even hostile. I am at peace with my beliefs but seldom find ways to share them successfully. When I was a young boy, I drowned in extremely cold salt water and was clinically dead for at least a half hour. I have a clear recall of the event. After that, I had great difficulty with my religious lessons. To me, listening to the concepts of organized religion sounds little different from listening to a child explain the story line of a favorite cartoon. I most often have found your comments to be calming and insightful and I do appreciate them greatly. littlewing ~ Yes, there is a sense of forces of existence in all things. "Lift a rock,and you will find me; split a board and I am there." It truly is through the eyes of a young child that we can see the infinite. Thank you for reading my poem and for taking the time to comment. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Hey if you do catch up with him can you give him a message..oh nevermind I can't type those words here |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
*smile* Got it covered. |
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teledon Member
since 2003-03-30
Posts 51Florida USA |
is god there or is he hidden? does he come so brashly bidden? keep havin' a ball! he won't care. ah, Bleeker St. I lived in the village many years ago. "keep it simple" |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Thank you for reading my poem. If you once lived in The Village, then The Village still lives in you. *smile* |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Icebox, thank you for the "discussion". We all have to find what works for us. I lean towards being open to a higher power - perhaps my "soul" or unconscious mind or spirit self. "Be still" - how many people are "still" these days? How many people find time to be still? If we can blot out the world, we can learn so many things - can't prove them, but learn we do! I follow your writings closely because I see a progression similar to mine and through that progression we will find a "peace surpassing all understanding". I'm not there just yet. Take care! |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Honeybunch ~ *smile* I agree with this completely. it is very likely that you will get there before me. I have some debts that must be paid and this lifetime will not make that possible. If there is an empty seat near a window, put my name on it, OK? |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Icebox, the seat is already there - your name is on it ... I didn't put it there, you did. Repaying debts is easy - acknowledge the wrong and then forgive yourself. I've not read the bible but some things we just know ... "forgive them for they know not what they do". Oh hell, it's hard forgiving those who have wronged us but if we try hard and long enough, we will! |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
I suppose that is true, but "I'm sorry" just is not always enough for some things. I do believe that in time all debts are settled. |
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