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Cpat Hair
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0 posted 2003-05-05 08:27 AM



Rita’s was closing.
In the kitchen I heard the sounds
Of rattled pans and metallic slide
Of a scraper on the grill.

Jean, handed me a beer
Grinned
And nodded her head towards
The source of the most noise.
“I think the kid is whipped.”
She laughed and winked
Then reached across the bar
And slapped me on the forehead
“You’re evil!”

I chuckled and took a swallow
Of the cold beer letting it slide
Across lingering memories.

“Let’s go see if they could
use some help.” I laughed
and headed for the kitchen.

When I saw the kid I knew
He hadn’t worked this hard in a long time
And had probably made the job a lot harder
Than it had to be,
But
He was still there and that showed grit.

“You boys want a hand?” I asked.
Joe said no, too proud to ask and in fact
Not needing any help.
He had done a fine job of making the kid’s
Night a living hell all by himself.

The kid said yes.

Putting on the best stern face I could
I replied “Make up your minds, I’m only asking once.”
And reached for an apron
Knowing the kid needed a break.

“Move over.” I told him and watched
both the relief and resentment cross his face.

I turned to the sink and began scrubbing.
“I’m Buddy.” I said over my shoulder
“You got a name?”
“Or you want I should call you Goob like Joe does?”

I laughed and heard him sputter
“Yeah, I have a name.”
“I’m Mike.”

“Well Mike, don’t just stand there,
grab a rag and clean the cooler.”

He shuffled off, looking a bit like
A pup that had been scolded,
And I turned to the sink
And back to thoughts of Lilly.

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Enchantress
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1 posted 2003-05-05 09:04 AM


Poor kid...Mike I mean.
Okay..now on to thoughts of Lilly...
Excellent write Captain.
~Morning hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

Sunshine
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2 posted 2003-05-05 09:09 AM



Goob fits better'n Mike...
at least, in tease

When you two going to open up the doors to
Fried Green Poets, anyway?

Janet Marie
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3 posted 2003-05-05 10:16 AM


Mike and Buddy....
hmmmmmm.... sounds like a couple of good ole boys who need to open a bar and sit and tell stories

Duncan
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4 posted 2003-05-05 10:34 AM


I'd love to JM but Buddy's a bit slow at keepin' up.....
Let's give him a chance to get a feel for this story tellin' thing, then we'll see!!  

'She laughed and winked
Then reached across the bar
And slapped me on the forehead
“You’re evil!”'

Didn't take Jean long to figure him out huh?!?!?!

regards2you
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5 posted 2003-05-05 01:09 PM




"Slapped me on the forehead...", so typical... tsk...

Love these stories and in so few sentences you've both managed to create: Rita, Jean, Joe, Goob-Mike, Buddy and Lilly....each unique...and everyone, someone we've met....

Okay....have to go see what's next...

Enjoying these.....


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