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gemjop
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since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587
Pencilveinia, USA

0 posted 2003-05-04 09:11 AM





You are warm upon me like sky
our black and whites
painted with the smell of green
as we lie in the music of countryside

Skin kissed
unaware of passers by
my epiphany of unscathed blue
here lies the love of passion for you

Mysteries of depth
indent the night stars into silence
smile with me he says
when i think of our love.

learning each day, for you and i, our paths have met, i've already learnt that you are love.

© Copyright 2003 gj - All Rights Reserved
Zaynab
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since 2003-05-04
Posts 59
Kuwait
1 posted 2003-05-04 10:13 AM


Beautiful...

I an't think what else to say! The words run so smoothly, and are rich with emotion.


my epiphany of unscathed blue
here lies the love of passion for you


My favourite lines. Your use of words is wonderful, and doesn't feel at all forced.

Well done

Zaynab

Kill me tonight and I will love again
Leave me to live and I live in pain
Leave me no love and I live in vain
Kill me tonight and kill the pain

Bill Charles
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since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now
2 posted 2003-05-04 01:59 PM


gemjop - I like the soft touch of your writing...

BC

garysgirl
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since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237
Florida, USA
3 posted 2003-05-04 02:07 PM


Hello Gemma  

I love this poem. This is so pretty...

Mysteries of depth
indent the night stars into silence
smile with me he says
when i think of our love.


You know who it makes me think of. Oh yes, Gary are I are as strong as ever. Our love gets stronger instead of weaker. I'm glad he's so patient.

I read your reply to my Tear Drop poem. I haven't responded to any of them yet, though. The thoughts that bring about that type of my writing are so sad.

I miss you when you aren't here. E-mail me sometimes whenever you can't be around. I thought you had gotten your computer fixed. Sorry it's on the blink.

Well, Lady, sorry I'm taking up your space on your poem. I'll talk to you later. Take care.  

Heart Hugs,
Ethel



Startime55
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since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148
Alberta, Canada
4 posted 2003-05-04 02:37 PM


Romantically beautiful....you write with all the tenderness of love....I love it...

Aenimal
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since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350
the ass-end of space
5 posted 2003-05-04 09:28 PM


bout time..nice to have you back
regards2you
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since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940
California
6 posted 2003-05-04 11:31 PM



Hi Gemma, so glad to see you back.

Like this a lot, soft and smooth and loving....


Hugs, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
        "Desiderata"

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549
By the Seaside
7 posted 2003-05-05 12:17 PM


You had me with the first verse...
I've missed reading you.

Nice to see you too gemma~

icebox
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since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383
in the shadows
8 posted 2003-05-05 12:22 PM


An uncluttered simple statement of love's strength.  Well done.  Thanks for sharing.
littlewing
Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655
New York
9 posted 2003-05-05 01:57 AM


gemma:  been wonderin where you have
been . . .

this is beautiful
(dont you dare stay away that long)
xxoo  

A. L. Becker
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since 2002-09-06
Posts 167
San Francisco, California
10 posted 2003-05-10 10:19 PM


Very nice Gemma. i liked it a lot.

"Oh, do not ask, 'What is it?'
Let us go and make our visit."
-Eliot

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577
displaced
11 posted 2003-05-11 04:17 AM


gorgeous write~
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