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Precious, and so Few
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Precious, and so Few |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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A careless weaving tears the fiber letting the draft blow through awakened by the sheer exhaling trembles from my breath quiet heart beats rest in patience pieced by peace a patchwork, worn absorbing the textured ache loose threads unraveling with passive acceptance tattered edges smooth and warm slipping stitches that no longer come together so little comfort left between the folds held together by the missing of the quilt that we had sewn as your friendship was a treasure and I'll forever keep you safely when I lie down in my memories so precious and so few. ~*~ [This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (05-07-2003 09:36 PM).] |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"so little comfort left between the folds held together by the missing of the quilt that we had sewn as your friendship was a treasure and I'll forever keep you safely when I lie down in my memories so precious and so few." So lovely..so gently spoken..so sad. Wonderful write Lori..much enjoyed. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
This was hard to read, I kept getting caught up in the slipped stiches, and it unraveled me, just so. Certainly, nothing careless about this... |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Smile, What a warm feel to this write. How well I know the verse, the music and the charm. Bravo! TD |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
so little comfort left between the folds held together by the missing of the quilt that we had sewn as your friendship was a treasure and I'll forever keep you safely when I lie down in my memories so precious and so few. so precious and so few..but treasured it seems... I would ask why not create anew.. weaving the old with what might be again.. enjoyed this blues... and it paints you in shades that match the clouds that crossed my eyes when reading it.. |
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Robert Frazier Senior Member
since 2003-02-06
Posts 1014 |
living with the memories we make...perfectly selected human condition fitted with a beautiful quilting metaphor. your work is well stitched! Rf |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
I hope that the tear in the comforter of your friendship, can be mended with careful stitches of compassion, using the finest threads of understanding... Richy |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Yes, Richy says it so well. For, that is what it takes. Compassion and empathy and validating ~feelings~ regardless of their source. For all feelings are valid, period, true friends don't need an accounting, first. As my daughter taught me so many years ago. This is beautiful, as are your feelings in this lovely poem. Such talent. Hugs, Pat  |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
aches |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Well dang, thanks so much for reading my simple weaving...one of these days I'll get it right. I apologize for going backwards again. Hugs all around you~ |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lori...going backwards in one of the best ways we teach ourselves how to go forward.  |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
I apologize for going backwards again. LOL... what you talking about Blues... I didn't see any backwards in this... just a lot of replies that hoped you could find a way to mend the tears if there were some... hugs back... and quit apologizing.. LOL |
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FlyingCloud Member
since 2003-04-28
Posts 151A little place inside my head |
Good friends are far and few between. Good job on this poem! +Genuine poetry can communicate before it is understood.+ |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
BluesSerenade - memories are too precious and few at times. I wonder where they go/ BC |
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Startime55 Member Elite
since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148Alberta, Canada |
*sigh* memories give life to the soul...You write of them with just the right amount of longing...Thank you.... |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Yes, friends are so far and few between, and it sadens me to see a friendship end as soon as it began, but it takes two, and I'm far from perfect, never claimed to be. It's either worth it or it isn't...sounds so plain and simple, alas, I should have known better. Thank you for reading, and for lending me your shoulder in poetry. Many more hugs~ [This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (05-07-2003 10:14 PM).] |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssssss) It is so hard for me to sow my memories too, for my whole childhood is stained with the tears I've cried and I'd rather just look ahead and leave the tapestry to burn! (sad sigh) This is very heartfelt, sweet friend, I send healing hugs your way, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lori, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
 very heartfelt |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Bluesie, Well, I'd love to quote my favorite part. But it seemed redundant to copy and paste the entire poem. How I love your writing...friend. If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
'loose threads unraveling with passive acceptance tattered edges smooth and warm slipping stitches that no longer come together so little comfort left between the folds' The title reminded me of that old song, think Bread did it, 'Precious and Few'. You have a way of capturing the feeling of loss that just cuts right through me sometimes. Excellent write Lori!  |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Bluesy: that tattered and torn loose up there sounds like my soul . . . memories . . . better to have than not (well . . . you know which ones I mean) amazing write lil' birdie xxoo |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Beautiful work! I spent much of my life trimming loose edges, taking care of errant threads. Some of them were mine; most were other people's. It gets to be a habit. *smile* Thank you for sharing this. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
glad this came around again |
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