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She Was For Sale

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Andrew Scott
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0 posted 02-15-2003 08:17 PM       View Profile for Andrew Scott   Email Andrew Scott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Andrew Scott

She was for sale
As were all things
At the corner of Louís Loans.
Sheíd worked others
But somehow something always brought her back
Age had waged its war
With scattered scars scoring her skin
But the curves still called
While strobing red screaming neon nightlights
Painted a rosy blush
That feigned a more youthful polish.
Suitors?
Sure, sheíd known her share
Some good
Most bad
Only one worth considering.
Her first
But that was long ago
A loverís lost touch in time
An echoed memory heard in those whoíd come afterwards
And now she faced yet another
In a long line of hopeful but failed masters.
This one would be no different
This one was old
Too old
Old enough to know better
But his paper was green
And who was she to say ďNoĒ.
Everything on Louís corner has its price

Times it was right there
Others in a dark ally
Or subway
Tonight favored a fallen down second floor flop
The roomís singular distinction resting in a gold plated watch
Fifty years in the making
Keeping time next to a black and white flame
Held by silver frame
Long since lost to the hour
Everything else was a gray wash
It wouldnít be long
Nicotine stained fingers beating a ceaseless staccato
And two bags of broken glass at every breath said as much
NoÖ Not long at all
But he showed no interest in exploring his purchase
Though upon the bed she lay
Black leather suit stripped
He made no play
So she waited
Waited through whisky-tea
Smoking drags
Coughing jags
The rinse of red rags
Waited
Silently still
Waited till
Reaching out
With tentative touch
An amateurís clutch?
Virginityís first?
Too late for that thirst
A surprisingly firm hand found her key
Then knowing lips the source
And from a long locked heart
Sprang a soul set free
To soar in true unity
For it was he
The one of many
The one that mattered
The one that set her soul to sing
Her first
And how her heart desired
Her last
As they made the love of the lost now found
In late night hours that turn to morn
Two becoming one
With the coming sun
Neither wishing it to end
Each knowing the truth
Not long at all

Morning found her alone
Cradled in the crook of his arm
Pale lips dyed in broken glass
Fitful fingers forever still
Golden time keeping watch
Till the lord came to call for past rent due
Payment came from Lou
Silver frame
Gold watch
And she
The three
The sum value of his life paid out
Now standing vigil on the corner
Awaiting the next hopeful buyer
But she knowing
There never will be another
To match her soul
Try as they might
He died that night
Everything has its price at Louís

[This message has been edited by Andrew Scott (02-17-2003 10:22 PM).]

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(sigh) WOW, that is quite poignant, sweet friend, it is saddening ton see so many fight for their youth or realize life is slipping by them so quickly then you realize you become part of that fixation and wonder if you can ever clean yourself up again! (big hugggsssssss) This is very heartfelt, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Andrew, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
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"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

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Sir Andrew...this one has my vote for sure, the imagery alone deserves a vote by its self
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MA:  Thanks for the read and write.  I suppose that's one way to look at this piece.

Lady Hoot:  Thank you as well.  This is one I dug up from my past and thought worthy of entering.  It is true, there is a lot going on in this piece and I hope others will see beyond the face of what is presented.  Peace.
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4 posted 02-16-2003 09:14 PM       View Profile for garysgirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit garysgirl's Home Page   View IP for garysgirl

Andrew, this was a very interesting poem-story. I really enjoyed reading it, although it was sad to me. I feel so bad for the women (and some boys) who are caught up in this kind of life. I wrote a poem the other day about a girl caught up in this life after she left home with her boyfriend. It was totally fiction, by the way. It's on Open 25, if you want to read it.


Ethel..
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5 posted 02-17-2003 02:09 AM       View Profile for Andrew Scott   Email Andrew Scott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Andrew Scott

Garysgirl, although I appreciate your words and I quite agree, this poem is not about a girl.  Nor is it about an alternative life style.  In fact, the main character isn't even human. As pointed out earlier, there is much more beyond the surface to this poem.  I'll be checking your's out in turn.  Thanks for the read and write.
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Way to go, Andrew...
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Great story, held me from start to finish!


Enjoyed.


Sunkissed.
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deadly unexpected ending..and nicely spun tale..remember to edit to as too in 'too old'
and a tick for this

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damned hard read. but it was great.

-majnu
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Nan: Your mark is the coin of the realm and I consider myself enriched by your kindness.

Sunkissed: Thanks for leaving your mark, glad you enjoyed.

Ecrivan: Thanks for the tick and the heads up. I don't know how I missed that one, becuase I know better.  Thanks again from a Canadian at heart.

Majnu: Sorry about the difficulty in reading. It can be a tounge twister in places, but I like to use such phonetic qualities when I write free verse.  Thanks for sloshing your way through and leaving your mark.

So, anybody got any ideas as to what the main character is?  Balladeer isn't allowed to play as he guessed right the first time I introduced this piece way back in the single digit forums.

[This message has been edited by Andrew Scott (02-18-2003 12:45 PM).]

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11 posted 02-17-2003 10:47 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

hehehe   ...and I still love it as much as I did then. Vote's in, Sir Andrew

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Nice poem. Enjoyed. My votes in.

Anyone can write, But only poets can capture the heart.

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Ohh...
this is amazing
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Sir Balladeer: My hats off to you as well and thanks for not playing.

Conel: Glad you enjoyed and thanks for the tick.

SEA: Thanks for the read and write.
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I am completely stumped.  I was so certain that I knew what this was about, and I'm reading it over and over again trying to figure out exactly what you meant.  

quote:
Though upon the bed she lay
Black leather suit stripped


Somehow I think this is a hint... I can't quite figure this out, but it's really got me scratching my head.  I just might vote once I figure this out, but until then I'm not going to... I'd think it insincere to compliment something which I don't understand.

I'll come back and read this again, and once I get it, I'll let you know.

Parasite

"Faith" means the will to avoid knowing what is true.
~ Friedrich Wilhelm Nietzsche

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You've proven yourself wrong Scott. You do know how to write a stunning free verse!
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I won't even hazzard a guess as to the meaning behind the meaning! I just appreciated it for its surface value!

Peace, Love, & Light,
EA
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Andrew~
I really enjoyed this.
Gotta love that soulful sound of a Sax.
Wonderfully done.
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

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This is simply superb, Sir! *S*
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Local Parasite:  I complement you on not voting for that which is not understood.  I wish more people would take such a stance, especially when it comes to politics.  As for a clue to what itís all about, see Vlraynesí reply.  I believe Vicky has the gist of it.  Thanks for your read and write.  Peace!

Munda:  Did I do that!  Dang, I hate when I prove myself wrong.  But then, I must have done something right if Iím wrong.  Just as long as I donít do two wrongs, cause two wrongs donít make a right.  But three rights do make a left.  Maybe itís time I left before I get it right and go wrong.  YaÖ thatís what Iíll do.  Thanks Munda for setting me straight.

Enchantress:  Thanks for the BIG thumbs up!

Earth Angle:  Thanks.  Glad it succeeds at many levels.

Vicky:  Hey, hey!  You win the Cupie Doll Prize!   You are definitely in the groove.

Suthern:  Just like your smile!  Thanks mílady.

[This message has been edited by Andrew Scott (02-19-2003 12:37 PM).]

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Before I vote for this one, I'd like to see you make this poem breathe more. You have wonderful thoughts and language here, but hardly any gaps. It's tough to read when the rhythm seems smashed together. Open it up a bit? Pause.
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I really enjoy poetry like this....cuz, it can take on many different interpretations... touching individuals in so many different ways....I had a couple of different ones myself...but you mentioned that Vicki had the right idea. This is GREAT!!!!!!!!! My votes in....

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Oh man that was sad!  I took it as a trumpet actually, and know that your poem is of a life that has been lived many times over to a lot of souls.  You definitely get my vote, as yes, there are many way of taking this poem, and I have printed it now to go deeper or lighter depending on what I see the next time.  Excellent write.

          
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