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BSC
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since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
A moonbow umbrellas the evening, So peaceful this nights deep hush, Stars in the sky seem spattered, As if from an artists damp brush. Drifting on untethered waters, Away from the dark, shadowed shore, Silhouetted by beams of moonlight, A swan glides into the moor. The reeds bow gently in welcome, As she weaves her way to her mate, A wake of whispering movement, Waters stirred now slowly abate. Nestled together in umber light, They settle in to their dreams, Wings embracing the others heart, Under the moon's softest beams. |
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Drummerboy06 Junior Member
since 2003-03-23
Posts 46Indiana |
Beautiful. It seems like you have captured the grace and magnificence of the swan with your words, the flow of you poem almost resembles the flow of the waters as the swan glides about it them. This piece should definitely be included in the book. Great write and good luck with being accepted. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Very very beautiful Bonnie! ~Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
BSC...You painted a beautiful picture before my eyes with your words.....with each line I could see!!!!! Beautiful!!!! Bridgette  "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (sigh) Oh Bonnie, this is beautiful, sweet friend, this made me cry as I long to be enfolded in the wings of my love and just imagining how beautiful that feels! (kiss on cheek) This is breathtaking and heavenly, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Bonnie, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
Most dreamy are these your graceful words that describe the habitat and gentle movement of the swan and her mate. Very very well written. -Bob |
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skyshine
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
I enjoyed this, Bonnie. Nature poems are always nice to read!  ~Liz Waited on a line of greens and blues, just to be the next to be with you.. |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
Truly perfect rhyme and meter and beautiful words. Joyce |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Bonnie, this is absolutely gorgeous! I really loved the story, but also the wonderful meter and how it flowed as smooth as a swan glides on the water! Reminded me of the pair of swans across the way in our park. What a great write, my friend!!! Accept these small gifts from my gypsy heart ~~S~~ |
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sweetwater Member
since 2002-12-16
Posts 178Perth |
I agree.. this is a simply beautiful piece, the subject is reflected in the words and rhythm. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Lovely - I had seven gorgeous swans swimming in front of my house yesterday... It's nesting time, and the yearlings are looking for new homes... It's a beautiful sight... Nicely said, Bonnie...  |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Bonnie...the images you've created with this piece are stunning to say the least. It gets my vote  P.S. Check your mail |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
A moonbow umbrellas the evening, So peaceful this nights deep hush, Stars in the sky seem spattered, As if from an artists damp brush. Drifting on untethered waters, Away from the dark, shadowed shore, Silhouetted by beams of moonlight, A swan glides into the moor. ================================= well this is just pure poetry in motion... what a treat of cadence and assonance to read aloud this is!!! And it goes unsaid the lovely imagery is the centepiece. Wonderful writing Poetess Bonnie "and when we get to the pearly gates ... |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
OH ,this is so beautiful and peaceful. I can see it. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This is just beautiful. *S* Thanks for giving us a peek into such gracefulness. *S* |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Sigh...awesome write, Bonnie. Much enjoyed! All writing comes |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
*sigh* Gorgeous piece you present us here Charisma |
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BSC
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Member Elite
since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
Thank you all so much for your kind replies, they mean a lot to me. I wish I could tell you just how much I have missed these blue pages, and how glad I am to be back. Thanks again. Bonnie |
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mysticpoe Senior Member
since 2003-02-28
Posts 883 |
Very nice poem Bonnie. I enjoyed the picture, with you words. Good luck!! mysticpoe |
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Poet4Christ Member
since 2003-02-19
Posts 211Oklahoma City |
Gotta love those nature poems,and this one is very eloquent and well developed in form and imagination. God bless you He that trusteth in his own heart is a fool: but whoso walketh wisely, he shall be delivered. Proverbs 28:26 |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Ahhhhh......*sigh* Such a beautiful and tranquil piece. Lovely and relaxing to read. Very well done. Marilyn |
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