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Below the lightning rose
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Below the lightning rose |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855
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Shedding wet skin and wearing windows, we are two roads, one lightning rose glows through the sky, marble rainstone, dampening silver, light as your hold. Every wet print remains to remind, to gray the deep sky and darken the night, into your hair, into your eyes, into itself, an imprint's remind. The wind follows close, whispering words of old mentions' flow, "remember your turn," the wind lifts the rain and brings down the sea that much nearer the rejection of need. Shedding wet skin and wearing the hope that locks will not snap to keys of lined gold against gravity, erosion and time. The pictures are gone of what you might find. Your hands are gold and close and warm like little breaths against hot storms, the coming cold will break the morn to ride the dawn and swim the thorn. Candle flames stutter in a new wait of words on the table, drinks in our hands, rain in our mouths and storms and the sea, and jars of dark soil, to bring what we leave. [This message has been edited by bsquirrel (01-08-2003 02:06 PM).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Yanno? I can't pretend I have a clue as to what this is about--but it's beautiful language, Mikie. You can make even scratching my head a pleasure.  |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
This is one of those times when the words flow and I did not question their meaning or intent. I'm sure it means something bearing on mortality, questions of an afterlife, or maybe just a broken relationship or a stage of life. But this poem is as ephemeral and ethereal to me as it is to you. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
one can draw from this many images..and it creates more than one thought... none maybe intended but as the images unfold and are applied to what I might have lived or known..it paints thoughts impressionsitic thoughts... travels nice across the old grey matter..and slips across the taste buds like a complex port... |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Thank you, Cpat. I'm much less expensive than those new ice wines.  |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
I love the inhibition of this, like you said you just let it flow and you can sense that. great write |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Thanks! |
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