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The Real Blues Serenade |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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Be still my love, invest in me sight your rhymes and all you feel write a song of symphonies crash your symbols close together, darling dance with me. Surrender me in the dark of night run your hands across my heart hold me up beneath the stars serenade me 'til the morning hours, gentle as the wind chimes. While shadows blend in pastel colors we'll paint a sunrise of our own above the sky in shades of blue beyond the forest through the trees, seen through evergreens. Come dream with me tucked undercovers quiet the sound of pounding thunder stay by me when I'm afraid spill the moon across the sea. ~and let the music play~ [This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (12-28-2002 02:07 AM).] |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Sweetie...by your picture alone, my dreams under the covers with you would be deleted by these moderators or at the very least moved over to the adult forum!!!!...But I liked your poem almost as much as your photo...now then, I'll cut and paste and print and take ya home and dream!!! |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Watch the way you're cutting, and go easy on the glue...wouldn't want to get stuck having to explain anything. You are quite the comedian ...and I'm always up for a good laugh. Thank you I think. Happy New Year to you and your toerag... don't leave home without it!!! [This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (12-27-2002 11:35 PM).] |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
It was meant as a compliment dear...and you are a very pretty young lady......Have a great New Year!!!! |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
I knew it was a compliment...and I thank you for it....now you've gone and made me blush. You're a compliment to your toerag!  |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Couldn't resist stopping in to read this one my friend. Great title. Great write. Happy New Year. ThisDiamond |
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mirror man Senior Member
since 2001-01-08
Posts 814 |
Oh, shame, shame. You must not encourage these scoundrels, my dear. And, oh my sister! Six months have I been gone, and not one word to your dear brother? Have you forgotten me already? I am crushed. Send my regards to the rest of the family. I like the poem too. [This message has been edited by mirror man (12-27-2002 06:38 PM).] |
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Skyfire 
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
I dont' know quite what to say to this... the reason? What you described is my ideal night. This is absolutely beautiful |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
And, oh my sister! Six months have I been gone, and not one word to your dear brother? Have you forgotten me already? I am crushed. Send my regards to the rest of the family. I like the poem too. Thanks Don't try to confuse me mirror man... I know it's easy to do but please don't! It distorts my line of vision and what I'm seeing in my mirror.... never the less it's been too long!!! |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
This Diamond~ These guys are trying to rattle me and I am forgetting where I was and where I'm supposed to be. Maybe it's time to log off, ya think? Thank you very much for reading...and for all your good wishes. Skyfire~ Oh that just makes my day, so glad I could set the mood for you, even if it is only a mindset. Thank you for saying what you said, I appreciate your thoughts on the subject. Happy 2003 to you~~~ |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Lori, again you have said how I feel about my Love......do you wanta write my love poems to him for me...........  (by the way, sweetie, that's a compliment, too.....)  |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
i like the symphony playing in the background, nice poem of love at its best |
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mirror man Senior Member
since 2001-01-08
Posts 814 |
Mmmm...I seem to have stepped in something again. Please forgive me. This is a very bad joke. The joke goes, "I'm not your sister." And I say, "No, but we could still be related. I was in Venture in '68. Where was your mother?" As I say, this is a very bad joke. However, we do appear to have something in common. Please feel free to email me if you want an honest talk. Sisterly to brotherly. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"Come dream with me tucked undercovers quiet the sound of pounding thunder stay by me when I'm afraid spill the moon across the sea. ~and let the music play~" Love this Lori...beautifully done! ~Hugs~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Thought I'd read the best of you today, "Red Ribbon", but I'm begining to see that your "best" is only "the best" until the next piece you post. If I were to dream (...not me, naw...never!), I'd have to sit beside you, pretend I was the one of whom you speak, lose myself in your eyes, your heart...your soul - be complete, in, of, and for you...and that's only based upon this beautiful piece your wrote. If I were to dream...I would surely dream, of you. jwesley ...and besides that...I like it! [This message has been edited by jwesley (12-27-2002 08:05 PM).] |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Yay! Awwwwwwwwww, I just love this, sweet friend, this is lovely, you sure are a serenade of friendship and love to us all! (kiss on cheek) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lori, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Ethel~ Now that is music to my ears... Thank you sweet one~ Ink~ I never thought of it as background music but yes, that's it exactly!!! thanks~ Oh brother, who IS that man in the mirror! Nancy~ Thank you for the warm hugs and always leaving a little something for me. Oh James~ I don't know what to say! I rarely remember my dreams, I just dream them over and color them mine. Thank you doesn't seem like nearly enough....I believe the real blues serenade has forgotten her lines. Thank you thank you~ Noah~ Your light is so bright and I am grateful that it shines on me...thank you dear poet~ |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
and you compliment me on my romantic thoughts....Geez, what's a guy supposed to do when .... after all, writing like this is impressively beautiful Lori, thanx for letting us taste the sweetness of the words and gaze upon the picture painted... |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Beautiful words indeed... the final stanza and last line were my favorite. Peace to you and yours. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Barry~ I'm learning from the best of them and that includes you. Thanks so much! I'm so glad you liked that verse, it's my favorite too..thank you Andrew~ |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
very, intensely beautiful! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Blues This is so beautifully written, with love making it very special. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Blues - ah yes, "if music be the food of love, play on." Love this. Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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Salty Senior Member
since 2002-11-23
Posts 669Texas |
All of this is beautiful, but my favorite part is the perfect ending Come dream with me tucked undercovers quiet the sound of pounding thunder stay by me when I'm afraid spill the moon across the sea. Great write!!! ~Salty In the Midst of movement and chaos, keep stillness inside of you. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
This is wonderful, It flowed so sweetly. Happy New Year Sandra |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Love that last line! |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Lori, this whispers so beautifully. Very lovely dear poetess  |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
You are so lovely......Cheers to you and 2003.... hugssssssssss  I sing to life |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thanks Dixie...I guess I am prone to being intense, so long as it comes out beautiful~ Martie~ Thanking you for reading it with love, and caring enough to let me know. Chris~ I want a boz stereo system so I can blast it! Thank you for hearing my music~ Salty Girl~ As you might guess the sea has a special meaning to me. Thanks for liking it. Sandra~ Some days my words flow with a sweetness and other days......they just lay down and die!  Thanks for reading~ Kacy~ Music is a many splendored thing and I like singing along! (which explains the funny looks I get when I'm stopped at a red light) Thank you Donna....I am always so happy to hear from you. Lauren~ Thank you dear friend.... You caught me on a good day when I was all dressed up with no where to go. Warm hugs to you always~ |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Oh, now, I can hear the melody to this one...have you written it yet?? This is beautiful and has such a soft bluesy feel to it!! Yeah........really, really nice, my friend!! Today is a new beginning!!! |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Nice! |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Nice of you to say so~ Thank you Eagle One~ [This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (12-31-2002 11:11 PM).] |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thank you for liking the sound of my bluesy tune Sunnyone~ I so appreciate you taking the time~ |
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FLOWERGIRL Junior Member
since 2003-01-04
Posts 40the woods of Pa |
I JUST FOUND THIS ONE AS BEAUTIFUL AS THE ONE WHO PENED IT WELL WHAT MORE CAN I ADD TO WHAT HAS NOT BEEN SHARED ALREADY THE REAL YOU NOT ONLY IN THIS ONE BUT ALL THE OTHERS I HAVE SEEN SO FAR YOU TRUELY HAVE MADE THE WORLD A BETTER PLACE JUST YOU BEING YOU DON'T CHANGE THAT MENTORED FLOWERGIRL |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
BluesSerenade - h'mmm, under the covers, h'mmm, email me...hehehe... BC |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Flowergirl~ What a nice thing to say. Thank you for making me feel so special. BC~ That line was just a nip and tuck so I don't blow my cover. Thanks. |
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