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Sunshine
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0 posted 2002-12-19 02:39 PM



Crossing Miles

~*~

Primary

she comes to me
two-dimensionally,
in visual delight, accenting
reds by yellows in golds,
a blue twinkle
of sparkling delight
blinking at me

hello

the gift of her is held lightly

this is me
this is where I live
this is me,
thinking of you,
my friend


she is kindred to a
heart’s beat
in primary colors ~
I know we would meld
in minds’ eye,
for I am her background

~*~

Secondary

The leaves still skip,
for there has been no rain
and the tease of snow
that did not fall
won’t chain back the melody
of a leaf in laughter…

the weather goes to the north
and the south of us,
leaving the legendary hole of our
native Indian area visibly saying
this is how it is…
as the saga of invisible holes
lives on…

we are bared and naked of leaves
and translucent of color…
all is beige day gray and
some of us are
too soon begging for an early spring…

winter solstice, just hours away

gave me last night’s moon
which left me
wanting

early early hours begged me
come, come, look…

fullest moon loomed o’erhead
casting cottonwood shadows of
come hither and
follow the sprite,

my eyes tracing the lines of
where would we go thoughts,

and the leaves rustled
in the legends of old…

~*~

Primary

Secondary is the background, then,
for primary color
as she would bring them,
eternal youth in smile,
brilliantine in touch,
sensual, perhaps, in twist of word
to make it stand
against the backdrop of
all that is,
all that was.

Sometimes I believe she feels
we were parted at birth,
because we sometimes touch each
other so…

through our poetry.

She is primary,
which is good, as I would
not understand,
otherwise,
for a flower girl needs to know
her colors.

Just as a background
of secondary,
all in neutral,
is needed,
to set them off.

~*~

For our flower girl.



© Copyright 2002 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
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Gaia
1 posted 2002-12-19 02:44 PM


I am keeping this one.
But you already know that.

Kethry
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2 posted 2002-12-19 03:40 PM


primary and secondary but both with vital roles to play and so intertwined that one becomes the other. Sunshine I love what you did with this.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



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3 posted 2002-12-19 03:45 PM


Kari.......she will love this.  Absolutely stunning work hon.
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4 posted 2002-12-19 03:46 PM


Secondary is the background, then,
for primary color
as she would bring them,
eternal youth in smile,
brilliantine in touch,
sensual, perhaps, in twist of word
to make it stand
against the backdrop of
all that is,
all that was.

Sometimes I believe she feels
we were parted at birth,
because we sometimes touch each
other so…

through our poetry.
across the miles indeed.... enjoyed this my friend...

Enchantress
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Canada eh.
5 posted 2002-12-19 03:51 PM


Oh, our flower girl is going to be so pleased with this!
And...I'm keeping it too!
Lovely, lovely write Karilea.
~Hugs~

~ Season's Greetings to my 'family' at Passions ~

Sunnyone
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6 posted 2002-12-19 04:13 PM


A masterpiece!!  

Pen how you truly feel...
it is a safety-valve for the soul!
    


inkedgoddess
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7 posted 2002-12-19 04:51 PM


very creative,heartfelt, and just terrific
use of words..

christian
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8 posted 2002-12-19 05:01 PM



this was creative, and thoughtful. i like
'she comes to me two dimensionally' ..
thats inviting. managed to keep my
attention--which is a pretty hard task
sometimes. it made me feel dimensions,
but, i enjoyed it. thanks for
the write.

**** [*****]

-chris.

vlraynes
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9 posted 2002-12-19 05:13 PM



Karilea~
This is absolutely gorgeous and is definately
one of my favorites from you.
Our flower girl is going to adore this.  
Hugs to you, my friend,
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

[This message has been edited by vlraynes (12-19-2002 05:15 PM).]

Daniel J D
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10 posted 2002-12-19 06:08 PM


Well done, good read.

Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love
(Daniel J D)

Martie
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11 posted 2002-12-19 07:15 PM


Dear Karilea

You have left me speechless with this touching connection you have made to friendship with such beautiful words.  I am honored to be gifted by such a lovely spirit voice from  you.  Thank you, my friend and much love!

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12 posted 2002-12-19 07:25 PM


After all your poetry I've read, it still is simply amazing to me. Thank you........  

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~  
                  

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13 posted 2002-12-19 08:27 PM


enjoyed
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14 posted 2002-12-20 09:37 AM


The leaves still skip,
for there has been no rain
and the tease of snow
that did not fall
won’t chain back the melody
of a leaf in laughter…

the weather goes to the north
and the south of us,
leaving the legendary hole of our
native Indian area visibly saying
this is how it is…
as the saga of invisible holes
lives on…

we are bared and naked of leaves
and translucent of color…
all is beige day gray and
some of us are
too soon begging for an early spring…

winter solstice, just hours away

gave me last night’s moon
which left me
wanting

early early hours begged me
come, come, look…

fullest moon loomed o’erhead
casting cottonwood shadows of
come hither and
follow the sprite,
my eyes tracing the lines of
where would we go thoughts,

and the leaves rustled
in the legends of old…
==============================

could this be any more stunning?
superb write of imagery...
but tis the heart of intend that makes this inspire so special.
Beautiful Kari...you touched the warm with this one...and then so did we

Will the wind remember the names it has blown in the past?
With this crutch, its old age and wisdom, it whispers no ... this will be the last.

jh

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