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GG
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since 2002-12-03

Posts 3532
Lost in thought

0 posted 2002-12-17 11:01 PM

Inside: the mechanical forces control.
The pain cuts deeper than flesh and soul.
On outside smiles, laughs and cheers;
She hides her pain and hides her tears.

And each time she’s alone she cries
For no one’s there to wipe her eyes.
She loves her friends and family,
She knows the Truth will set her free.

But the torment, torture, and all the pain
Have deceived her: leaving only shame.
And now she’s trapped living a life
Where despair cuts hearts: as a knife.

Living, breathing, blinking even;
She hopes and prays: for she believes in
God almighty, the Holy Father
A Sweet Protector, she is His daughter.

(this I wrote awhile ago. I know its a depressing post, sorry! ..but I did still have hope, and God, through friends, helped me and still does.)

- And so it was that time stood still -

[This message has been edited by GG (12-17-2002 11:57 PM).]

Salty
Senior Member

since 2002-11-23

Posts 669
Texas

1 posted 2002-12-18 12:11 PM

Yes it is a sad one...but captured emotions and true feelings. A very well done write.

~Salty

In the Midst of movement and chaos, keep stillness inside of you.
--Deepak Chop

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

2 posted 2002-12-18 01:27 AM

It's ok, don't say sorry...I love the sad ones. Call me sick...*shrugging*

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

3 posted 2002-12-18 09:23 AM

yes..nicely done and though sad..life is just sometimes sad...and we write about it.

Connel

Senior Member

since 2002-11-04

Posts 736
Florida, USA

4 posted 2002-12-18 09:34 AM

It is sad.. But it is extremly beatiful.. And it must have taken a while to wright, or perhaps only a minute? lol... Because normally when you are down is when you can write the best poem... Good job.

I wish to become a great poet some day, but it will only come in time. Til then, I shall write my poems, and wait.

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

5 posted 2002-12-18 09:38 AM

GG
A wonderful write, enjoyed.

regards2you
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since 2002-10-01

Posts 3940
California

6 posted 2002-12-18 09:47 AM

Sad and depressing? NO WAY! This is a wonderful tribute to God. When we ~can't~, then, HE WILL, in His own time, if we have faith. Sometimes, He, through friends, through a written word, a personal experience with Him....He has as many ways of delivering us, as people recognizing their need for a higher power....cause they just can't do it alone....

True it takes surrender and acceptance of our inability....

And, in the waiting for Him to act, is how we develope patience, and perseverance and faith, etc. These are just my opinions, but, they work for me.

GG, I like this a lot! Enjoyed!

Hugs and warm regards, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
"Desiderata"

GG
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since 2002-12-03

Posts 3532
Lost in thought

7 posted 2002-12-18 09:49 AM

Yea, only took a minute to write

thanks for each of your kind replies.
I'm glad you all liked it, And Pat, yes, He really can when we can't!
Take care and His blessings to you this Christmas

Always, GG

- And so it was that time stood still -

[This message has been edited by GG (12-18-2002 09:52 AM).]

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

8 posted 2002-12-18 09:51 AM

What an incredible write! Truly inspirational!

hugs,
Earth Angel

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