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The War of Night and Day
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The War of Night and Day |
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Crysania Member
since 2002-09-21
Posts 67Lost in a dream. (Please don't wake!) |
This started as an answering poem to one of the challenges (Must have 'I thought I could fly', and be about a sunrise), but it sort of took on a life of it's own and turned out completely different. *shrugs* I'm happy with the results, but I'd like feedback. Whad'ya'll think? The War Of Night And Day Morning stole Night And hid it in Dawn Dawn painted the sky To welcome the Sun The Sun rose grandly A merry ol' queen Her ladies-in-waiting Gracious sunbeams The sunbeams scattered Danced across the land "The queen has arrived! Her Majesty grand!" Trees and animals alike Rose to greet the Sun Who sat on her throne On the horizon Night watched from his jail In Dawn's colourful hold Guarded by Morning So solemn and bold But alas came rescue! From Night's kingdom afar! Parading in boldly An army of stars! The stars fought valently(SP?) Against the Morning guards And they chased back the Sunbeams Into Her Majesty's arms Proudly Night broke From his jail that was Dawn And rose to the sky From where he had come Twilight re-painted the sky This time in Dusk's hues And the stars raced about Spreading the news "The king is back! The battle is won! You can now safely rest In the comfort of home!" For as grand and gracious As Her Majesty was The world felt safer sleeping With Night watching above And so all retreated To their versions of home And drifted into sleep Trusting and warm Night guarded from the sky Bidding all a good sleep And the world fell silent Save little stars' peeps As for the Sun and her ladies The fled right away Only to return The very next day Do what you want and say what you feel. Those who matter won't mind and those who mind don't matter. (Forget who said that...must find their name.) [This message has been edited by Crysania (11-09-2002 01:15 PM).] |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
I like this poem. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Crysania Member
since 2002-09-21
Posts 67Lost in a dream. (Please don't wake!) |
Thanks. ;D It's sort of half mystical, and half for fun. I wrote the first stanza a little while ago, when I was practicing a writing technique (taking abstract ideas and makign them concrete objects. ie: Morning stealing Night and hiding it in Dawn.), and the rest I scribbled down th'smornin'.  Do what you want and say what you feel. Those who matter won't mind and those who mind don't matter. (Forget who said that...must find their name.) |
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Kielo Senior Member
since 2002-02-11
Posts 1109 |
 You continue to amaze me. I need to write more often, or you'll be writing circles around me pretty soon... if you aren't already... lol. Another wonderful poem.  *hugs*Arnthor According to statistics, a man eats a prune every twenty seconds. I don't know who this fellw is, but I know where to find him. |
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Crysania Member
since 2002-09-21
Posts 67Lost in a dream. (Please don't wake!) |
Thank you, sister dear. Naw, you're better than I. One day, though, I may just catch up! *wink* Do what you want and say what you feel. Those who matter won't mind and those who mind don't matter. (Forget who said that...must find their name.) |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssssss) Oh Stephanie, this is soooooo beautiful, sweet friend, I love both the night and day and always the other will conquer the other simotaneously! (kiss on cheek) This is excellent, sweet friend, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Stephanie, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Thank goodness one needs the other... No fangs here... just honest appreciation. |
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Crysania Member
since 2002-09-21
Posts 67Lost in a dream. (Please don't wake!) |
Thank you both, it makes me feel good to hear others say they like my work. Suffering from low confidence as I am, it really does help! Do what you want and say what you feel. Those who matter won't mind and those who mind don't matter. (Forget who said that...must find their name.) |
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