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Wind
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0 posted 2002-10-24 06:30 PM



"I have a surprise for you"

An ordinary bag
Brown and slightly ripped
Made of the same stuff as cheap paper towels in public bathrooms

"Oh, thanks."

Not much expression
And the giver's eyes start to swell will tears
And they realize that they choose the wrong person
to give this gift to

"What's in the bag?"

Something I wanted to show you
But I changed my mind
But maybe I'll give it to you
when you are ready to apreciate it.

© Copyright 2002 Liz - All Rights Reserved
the_loner_23
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1 posted 2002-10-25 12:53 PM


Wonderfully written. i really enjoyed the read.

Cold hands means a warm heart

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2 posted 2002-10-25 12:57 PM


Wind, there is so much truth found in these words. It could have so many different meanings...makes a person ponder their thoughts. You wrote it very well. thanks for sharing.

Love To All,
Ethel

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3 posted 2002-10-30 04:52 PM


Sounds like my ex wife.
Whenever I gave her flowers all hell broke loose!

Thanks for sharing!
Enjoyed!

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4 posted 2002-10-30 05:16 PM




(sigh) Oh Liz, this is so well-written, sweet friend, I know this feeling and it really is depressing when we should rather be thankful for the more simpler displays of generosity we share! (big hugggssssss) This is wonderful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiufl heart, sweet Liz, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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5 posted 2002-10-30 05:57 PM


I had a cop ask me this once....it didn't go real well.....great write
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