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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Hush please…. I do not mean to be ungrateful Nor in any way rude But you still whisper And I have lost too many hours Listening to your half heard Then scribing meaning Can you not let me rest Living life as it seems others do What demands are you now Exacting of me When I have said “no more” I am sure many would Hear you with joy Telling your stories Painting your woes So why not seek them out Or simply reply to those That seek you? I am not sufficient And your toll has been painful To pay or play. Please… I ask you once again Hush these whispers I am not a poet I am ….. |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
efforts to still the voice just seem to make it louder don't they? I had some Great Teacher references here but wont lay that on you oh...whoops  maybe....let them come and sometimes? The Editor can take a break -- doesn't have to be there liked this poem a ponderer |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Hush... please... |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
if not editor..then scribe alone is more than today or anytime of late I have willingly embraced... appreciate the time Brian...and the thoughts... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
hey you... I know. Be still you must... even christed knows that dust piles in pound in form of hill creates the mountain of fulfill that hermit with a cane in hand must sometimes seek-- I understand. |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
there's this new drug called Viagra?...It works for Balladeer....(when he takes twice the dosage)....You really put alot of thought into your work... |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Sunshine... yes Ma'am..I am trying very hard to do just that..hush... the quiet would serve me well...and ( chuckling) relieve the rest of you from my rambles. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Ser.... perhaps my mind a bit slow this day... but the things I read in your reply are indeed mixed messages...( chuckling) always an experience to see your thoughts..and one that I enjoy a great deal. Thanks Sis.. Toe... really it works for him??? I'd heard it didn't work for everyone...especially some of those that didn't have much to work with in the beginning... maybe there is hope for me!!!! A lot of thought? Heck no... I don't know how to think...if it wasn't for this book "how to cheat at writing poems and change your oil at the same time" I'd have never ventured out to write.. |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Cpat, Not quite as "serene" as some poems you write. Well you could have at least made this a multiple choice at the end........ I'd have to say then, this character is simply ~a man in love~ But my interpretation this week of other poems hasn't been quite on the mark....if there is such a thing as 'correct' interpretation It also sounds like a tortured soul, almost being taunted, or haunted? Or, both! Mysterious, to say the least. Enjoy your poetry a geat deal. Thanks, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Capt, They say silence is golden, enjoyed. |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Hey, I have that book... Writin' poems is easy I do it all the time, Just drain the oil till it's dry And wait for it to rhyme The moderators will Filter it just fine Then rotate the tires and poem To "adult" most every time. [This message has been edited by Toerag (10-23-2002 09:56 AM).] |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Pat: perhaps there are no right or wrong intrepetations of poetry..only opinions as to how the words spoke to you. In the person that reads is a set of codes..written by all life experiences they have been a part of..the words spoken or read then get interpeted through that system of codes to mean what they the person see of life. So interpeting a poem is personal..and how can yours be wrong? Multiple choice? ( chuckling) why give only the answers to choose from and limit the person reading? Life isn't that way most of the time...and I didn't want this one to be either... thanks for the read..and the comments.. they are appreciated. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Sy.. thanks for the thoughts my friend.. and yes at times it is indeed golden. Toe... I see you have the preface memorized!! I am impressed. ( now I said memorized cause I know you don't read yourself and this early in the day the missus isn't likely to have found her glasses to read to you) (chuckling) |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
LOL...no way...you just reminded me of what I seem to be saying...all too often! |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Ron. Smiling. Your tone here reminds me of that which generated some interesting chats at The Circle. Have you read Emerson's essay, "The Poet"? It may be online; many of his essays are. It helps. Thank you for sharing. Bob |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Sunshine... well now, you shouldn't be thinking things like that...it's coming on winter and we need all the sunshine we can get during those drear days... Bob... I read that essay many years ago and could not begin to tell you anything about it today, so perhaps I should revisit it and see if indeed it means more to me now than it did then...many things do you know.. many things do... thanks my friend... |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
as always, a delight to read, your responses to the responses, too!!! sorry, though, I believe those deemed to be writers are deemed or is it doomed to be writers that voice just keeps going off in their heads and when we be still, louder still is the voice Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Yes, Sir! |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
VAS... many thanks for the words... they are indeed a pleasure as well to read. I have known you for some time now, and have never said it, but have nejoyed so much watching your style mature and your writing improve... you now capture images with a deft grace, yet maintain a sense of humor that is at times child like in inoccence... keep on writing my friend.... Sunshine..( chuckling) about time you listened to me!!!! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I am sure many would Hear you with joy Telling your stories Painting your woes So why not seek them out Or simply reply to those That seek you? LOL... our muses seem to take perverse joy in visiting when they like... regardless of our convenience or wishes. *S* But there's no use denying... you ARE a poet... and the silence would become uncomfortable were it granted? *G* I thoroughly enjoyed the poem... and the responses. LOL |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ron Do not hush the voices they are part of you wanting out let them speak your mind with quill and then the words will quiet 'till another night in hope of sleep they speak the place in which you weep You have too much to say, my friend...that I, for one, want to hear. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Suthern... now your statement of me being a poet IS open to debate...( chuckling) If'n you ask some people that is just not so...and if'n you ask me..I'd tell you I am not a poet. I do not think I have ever written a poem...they have all written me. Since I was not the one taking an active part in the process..it can not logically be said I am a poet.. ( smiling) As for the silence... I'm not so sure it would be a bad thing. Perhaps in learning to live with it and in exploring the depths of it...one can if not explain to others at least understand inside themselves much more of the "all" we seem to seek. thank you for the time and for the comments they are appreciated a great deal... |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Martie my friend... first...a hug to you for your recent loss and a thought for you and your family of peace... secondly... your verse is lovely.. as well as touching. Silencing the words is at times not a choice but a need... I feel a heavy need to silence them for now if not for longer. We will see as we all know life is as life is... so we wait..and we live it.. hugs again.. just because I like to ( laughing) and it makes Toe jealous.... he thinks he can hug all the women here... or is that deer.... oh yeah.. I think it is both of them.... |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
May I say, that this has been quite a learning experience for me!---your poem, the replies you have received, and most especially the replies that you have given. Thank you so very much! Lots for me to assimilate and internalize! ~ You ARE a poet--and a fine one at that, dear Cpat! ~ EA |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
EA... you are far too kind as have many people here seem to be, to call the drivel I write poems and to say I am a poet.. thank you and thanks to all who may have thought so or said so.. as for the assimilate... just a few thoughts for you... In the beginning there were words boulder strewn stream talking to a gurgle of passing time they lay beneath it all waiting only for storm rushed flood to uncover them so they could float surface bound and burst mud bubbled ways as they floated In the middle the pools are deeper and sudden rush of storm disturbs the bottom less leaving what has settled in undisturbed lie Stream beds change as do you and I |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
......weary. There I finished for you. Here's to hoped for peace. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
RS... see there you are... saying in one word what it has taken me hundreds in this thread to convey... why is it we have to add all the wrappings around the feel or thought and then ( like I am now) discuss it at length in order for us to feel justified that we have endeavored to explain? the wish for peace... that I thank you for. the demons we all live with can be managed I am sure... but at the least we can try. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
So the end of Iambe was the end of another thing, too? That makes two new beginnings, then. Do whatcha want with 'em. I'll still be yr friend. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Mikey..... who knows? Perhaps some prose in my future... a run at short stories that have no future ( chuckling) perhaps just a wait and a letting settle of dusty seasons then again embracing the form so generously attributed by some as poetry.. as for friends..why would that change?  Life is getting in my way... work not being the least of it...so as life changes so do we... I'll be around I'm sure as old habits are hard to break and reading the words of some people on here is as addictive as anything I have ever done ( no I'm not telling what I have or have not done in the past...and as for inhaling.. no comment.) Love ya bud... ( chuckling) |
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Soleil Noir Senior Member
since 2001-12-19
Posts 688USA |
Seems like everyone has a comment in the hushed moment ~ an interlude, if you will, on a quiet, peaceful shhhhh |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Cpat, thank you so much for the fine lesson in poetry you have given here....in your poem and your replies. I especially like the reply above to Linda. Thanks. Love to All, Ethel |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Soliel Noir.... I am at a loss of words to reply. Not a usual thing for me...but what begs saying pulls another poem..and I'm trying to quit you know ( smiling) Heartfelt thanks for showing up.... Ethel.. Lessons? Surely you jest!!! ( smiling) One can't teach what one doesn't know...and I know little... so how in the world could I have given you lessons? I'd say you knew much more than I... and perhaps what you thought were lessons were indeed only you listening to what was inside you.. what you already knew. Thank you for the all of the kind replies and the kind words.. OK... so one more time the words win.. I saw him reach back pocket bulging to pay for the next and thought of how we are always reaching to pay I felt the spin.. they were talking to me inside the swirl waiting unguarded moment to in advantage leap Lashing out my tongue refused to speak but torment remained unmuted I reached for my back pocket knowing I had again to pay for next Soliel: Shhhhhhh... lay gentle the sounds against places you treasure and listen for that which is not this song soft in tenor is not forgot Hush... and in tender feel the lips mouth words abandonded for meaning take form again breathing... |
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Soleil Noir Senior Member
since 2001-12-19
Posts 688USA |
...so the hush remains almost as quiet as the tender breath warmed by the slightest touch of lip to cheek in the gray day, sleep again sleep again, and curl warm in combined hush... |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
(smiling) I knew I would be outdone by your words.... or is that undone? I hear the words to answer. but deny them the form to exit and answer, so for you a hug and a hope you find the curl of next to warm your grey days and nights. thanks for the words and thoughts... they are always warm... |
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