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Gentle Spirit
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0 posted 2002-10-19 03:24 PM





Shadows Of The Night


The fear begins within
the shadows of the night.
Shadows that cause lost souls
to be consumed with fright.

Shadows dance upon the wall
and you don’t know if they’re real.
You wonder if you’ll be safe
or if you will be its next meal.





You hear the rattling windows
which make such ghastly sounds,
your pulse suddenly does quicken
as your heart begins to pound.

Are demons waiting there
hidden within the musty murk?
Are they around every corner,
do you wonder where they lurk?

Your heart becomes filled with fear
and you pray for the morning light,
you can run, but you can’t hide
from the shadows of the night.



{ 10-23-99 a hallows challenge
revised on 10-19-2002}

If I have touched one heart through my words, then I have acheived my dream...

© Copyright 2002 dmsmith - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2002-10-19 03:34 PM




Ooohhhhh hoo hoo! (smiles) This is a delightful haunting treat, sweet friend, yes, you can't escape the shadows, ahahaha! (giggles) This is wonderful, sweet friend, I too love Halloween just for some fun, yay, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Donna, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Ivy Rose
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2 posted 2002-10-19 03:35 PM


Gentle Spirit...Thanks for your comment on "Autumn Foliage Review."  This poem was excellent for this Halloween season. Loved the dark images and the moon-lit words.
***Ivy Rose

[This message has been edited by Ivy Rose (10-19-2002 03:36 PM).]

Earth Angel
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3 posted 2002-10-19 03:38 PM


Donna, God bless you! Even when writing a spooky poem such as this, your gentleness and grace comes through!

I think this poem is great--and so are you!

Linda

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4 posted 2002-10-19 03:47 PM


Donna....Yikes!! This really is a spooky one. Where is my big sister when I need her? lol. Enchantress is probably brewing up some scarey words of her own. Well done sweet poetess. Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

Gentle Spirit
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5 posted 2002-10-19 03:49 PM


Noah dear friend, thank you.  You are a delightful treat to us all!

Ivy Rose, you are welcome and I am pleased
that you enjoyed the images.

Gentle Spirit
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6 posted 2002-10-19 03:51 PM


Linda you grace me with your kindness and friendship.  Thank you and hugs.

Ah Chris thank you....and you are right I am sure that Enchantress will be concocting a delightful treat for us all as she so often does.  Hugs sweetie.  

What do you say Nancy, do you have something special for us????  I dare ya, nah....I double dare ya!   HUGS!!

[This message has been edited by Gentle Spirit (10-19-2002 03:52 PM).]

SimplyGold
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7 posted 2002-10-19 04:00 PM


Gentle Spirit, Ooh! What a chilling delight.
Enjoyed it very much. Love "Are demons waitng there hidden within the musty murk?"

A chill has gone up my spine..

Well done!
SG

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8 posted 2002-10-19 04:04 PM


SG thank you!  So pleased that you enjoyed


And NOW for Nancy.......
DOUBLE DARE YA
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If I have touched one heart through my words, then I have acheived my dream...

Enchantress
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9 posted 2002-10-19 04:32 PM


Oh Donna..I'm not good at all with spooky stories!  But you have come up with a dandy!!
Perhaps I can think of something short and a little on the scary side...
~Hugs sweetie~

~ Time has cast a spell on you
  So you won't ever forget me ~

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10 posted 2002-10-19 06:35 PM


OOOOHHH, Donna.....there's some spooks out there. HeeHee!!! This is delightful. I love the graphics, too. I wish I could do that. It really accentuates the words, doesn't it? Balladeer tried to tell me how, but I don't have a  web site of my own and I can't seem to do it the other way, either. So, I'll just have to put the words down that I feel.


As you know already, because I think I tell you every time I reply to you, I really love your poetry.
thanks for sharing.
Love to All,
Ethel

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11 posted 2002-10-19 06:35 PM


OOOOHHH, Donna.....there's some spooks out there. HeeHee!!! This is delightful. I love the graphics, too. I wish I could do that. It really accentuates the words, doesn't it? Balladeer tried to tell me how, but I don't have a  web site of my own and I can't seem to do it the other way, either. So, I'll just have to put the words down that I feel.


As you know already, because I think I tell you every time I reply to you, I really love your poetry.
thanks for sharing.
Love to All,
Ethel

Bill Charles
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12 posted 2002-10-19 06:50 PM


Gentle Spirit - I saw the shadows of the night last night. H'mmmm, now I know what they are...

BC

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13 posted 2002-10-19 07:39 PM


kinda spooky...makes me wanna change my screen name
scorpio
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14 posted 2002-10-19 08:21 PM


Ah Gentle Spirit...you had me on the edge of my chair...now to see if Enchantress can push me off it...
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15 posted 2002-10-19 09:46 PM


GS~

what a delightfully frightening read...
i too love halloween, just for some good
fun. this is a great write, i enjoyed it
very much!

take care
amy

"love is like a butterfly--
if you chase it,
it will surely fly away,instead
hold it close and watch it grow into
something beautiful"
~me~

Gentle Spirit
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16 posted 2002-10-20 10:42 AM


Thank you all again for such lovely replies and I hope you all have a very safe trick or treat holiday.  Nancy and Chris, thank you both for making this a very special weekend for me and meeting this challenge between to sisters!!  

For anyone who would like to see how this has evolved into some wonderful writing please check out the links below.  Hugs and peace to all.


The challenge
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Nightshades Reply

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Enchantress's Reply
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If I have touched one heart through my words, then I have acheived my dream...

sigheyes
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17 posted 2002-10-20 01:11 PM


D~ I remember seeing this from a few years back.  I really enjoyed the subtle changes that you made to it.  They were very effective!  
ShadowRider
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18 posted 2002-10-20 08:56 PM


~smiling and enjoying~
somehow i never expected the sweet flowing words of Donna to write of horror and death
and. . . .why is it sooooo cold in here?  BRRRR
Waaaaaay good for meeting the challenge.  I wrote my own and had the courage to post it after seeing your wonner-full scary t'ing!
jeff

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