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dinky
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since 2002-10-19
Posts 258


0 posted 2003-01-12 05:04 PM


he cried today,
but it didnt take the pain away
it will take some time he said,
repeating it over and over in his head
i hate her i thought,
look at all the pain she's brought
but does she really care?
of the love for her that still lingers there
he'll be there for me,
for when i'm not happy
open up the door please
there's some pain you need to releave
what was it you heard me say?
i dont know,
i'm quite confused today
i dont want you to go
my feelings i will finally show
please dont cry anymore
and open up the door

"sometimes i just feel like
quittin i still might
why do i put up this fight?
why do i still write?"

© Copyright 2003 samantha rae - All Rights Reserved
devinechild22
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since 2002-08-28
Posts 571

1 posted 2003-01-12 10:03 PM


Aww Sam this is so sad. You have really grown as a writer and I think you will be the bestest ever man!!!!
LOL
PLUMBER!!!!!
               *Allison*

"O My love
Please don`t cry
I`ll wash my bloody hands
And well start a new life"
-Good Charlotte

Darkness
Member
since 2002-10-17
Posts 202
The place just beyond my eyes, where my spirit flies.
2 posted 2003-01-13 02:02 PM


Bien Bien! You've captured a break up perfectly whether it be between good friends or a boy friend girlfriend deal.

Keep on writing
I'll be a-keepin' my eye on ye!!!!!

foreverwithyou
Member
since 2002-10-20
Posts 204
Wonderland
3 posted 2003-01-13 08:30 PM


ahhh sam be careful of the plumber!!!hes trying to take ur poetry man!!
this was kewlish sam (and that dont mean that i dont like it as u like to say) it was good but i still like spinal dose (if that was the name heh heh)good job man!happy B-day orlando bloom!!

"I am who I am who I am who am I?"

devinechild22
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since 2002-08-28
Posts 571

4 posted 2003-01-14 04:56 PM


AWESOME!!!!!!!! O I already replied to this. O well it deserves TONS of replies.!!!!!!

"O My love
Please don`t cry
I`ll wash my bloody hands
And well start a new life"
-Good Charlotte

devinechild22
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since 2002-08-28
Posts 571

5 posted 2003-01-14 04:58 PM


So I hear Orlando`s B-day was memorable for ypu too!!!

"O My love
Please don`t cry
I`ll wash my bloody hands
And well start a new life"
-Good Charlotte

devinechild22
Senior Member
since 2002-08-28
Posts 571

6 posted 2003-01-14 05:01 PM


man this is awesome!!!! look at it man!

"O My love
Please don`t cry
I`ll wash my bloody hands
And well start a new life"
-Good Charlotte

dinky
Member
since 2002-10-19
Posts 258

7 posted 2003-01-14 09:36 PM


hey,
thx to every1 for replyin!!
geez allison, how many times were u plannin on replyin?!?
thx again tho, it means alot!!
~samantha~

"sometimes i just feel like
quittin i still might
why do i put up this fight?
why do i still write?"

vlraynes
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since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...
8 posted 2003-01-18 05:24 PM



LOL @ Allison...I think she likes it.

Samantha~
I have to say that I like this too...very much.
You did an excellent job of conveying the emotions
in this piece and, as Allison said, you are really growing
as a writer, and it shows.  Keep up the great work.
Beautifully penned.
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

[This message has been edited by vlraynes (01-18-2003 05:25 PM).]

devinechild22
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since 2002-08-28
Posts 571

9 posted 2003-01-19 06:08 PM


Like I said..This gal gets better and better every time! Ask Orlando!!! LMAO!!!! GO SAM GO SAM GO GO GO SAM!!!! You know what that reminds me of? "Steve Urkle goin Purkle! Steve Purkle goin Urkle!!!" lol
       *Allison*

"O My love
Please don`t cry
I`ll wash my bloody hands
And well start a new life"
-Good Charlotte

Krystin18
Junior Member
since 2003-01-19
Posts 20
Ontario, Canada
10 posted 2003-01-19 07:25 PM


mmmm...  it confused me at first lol but i like
dinky
Member
since 2002-10-19
Posts 258

11 posted 2003-01-19 08:05 PM


hey,
omg allison!!! lol
that reminded me of...
"Jenna Jenna!~! lol
thx to every1 for replyin!!

"sometimes i just feel like
quittin i still might
why do i put up this fight?
why do i still write?"

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