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CloudedDreams
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0 posted 2002-12-21 11:54 AM


This is dedicated to the one who completely turned my life around.

Anguish and sorrow I always went through
Daily depression was far from new
For years I prayed fro something true
Then I stumbled across you

At first I tried to push you away
Thought were another burden to my day
But you showed that you had faith
And something in me let you stay

I know now there's something better
That sunlight is breaking the rainy weather
And I hope this feeling can last forever..

(Chorus)
You helped me find me
And what I can truly be
Unbound and Beautiful
And finally free

You changed my life
Revived me inside
And I can be carefree
with you by my side

You helped me grow
Into something I know
That will bring happiness
And I love you so


I can see a world so clear
Everything is so ugly or drear
As long as I know you are near
All my worries dissappear

The look you give with your copper eyes
Stir strange feelings deep inside
You touch sends jolts through my mind
My heatr can finally realize

Things are finally better
Outside there is perfect weather
I KNOW this will last forever

(chorus)

....i love you so....

Yes there will be tommorrow, but will you be there to greet it?

© Copyright 2002 Eliza K. - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2002-12-21 12:03 PM


Wow, this was great.  I especially liked the way you changed

"I know now there's something better
That sunlight is breaking the rainy weather
And I hope this feeling can last forever.."

to

"Things are finally better
Outside there is perfect weather
I KNOW this will last forever"

I thought this was a well written poem, and look forward to more.

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