A Quarter and A Phone Booth

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Teen Poetry #6

A Quarter and A Phone Booth

Hallucination
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since 2001-03-18

Posts 419

0 posted 2002-12-17 06:04 PM

"A Quarter and A Phone Booth"
(17/12/02)
© 2002 Brian Eggertsen, All Rights Reserved

Verse 1
Was on my way home, when my car said no, right outside this motel.
The end of the day, decided to stay, but it would become hell.
Had no way to tell, though she knows me well, she gets pretty nervous.
I wanted to call, found no phone at all, unwillingly a guest...

Refrain
Stuck here in this sleezy old motel room
Where they don't change the sheets and never clean,
Cracks in the walls no glass in the windows
Tv, radio or coffee machine.
A tiny bed's thrown into the corner
And a light ball has the disco fever,
I'm a quarter and a phone booth away
From telling her that I really need her.

Verse 2
Soon as morning showed, was ready to go, but the parts never came.
One more night to kill, with overprized bills, it's driving me insane.
Wand'ring on my own, fin'lly found a phone, but an unatacthed cord,
Sitting in a room, the whole afternoon, solitair's kind of borred.

Refrain

[This message has been edited by Hallucination (12-17-2002 07:29 PM).]

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

1 posted 2002-12-21 01:59 AM

Brian~
This is, without a doubt, my favorite of yours so far.
The rhythm and flow of this is excellent.
It has such a natural feel about it.
I REALLY enjoyed reading this.
Your talent is growing and it shows.
~Vicky
"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

CloudedDreams
Member

since 2002-11-23

Posts 210
My Fantasy Realm

2 posted 2002-12-21 09:18 PM

hey, great write. I am feeling frustration from this song. It is really descriptive too. Keep it up!

aries_luv_ppl
Senior Member

since 2001-09-20

Posts 1448
Universal Mind

3 posted 2002-12-21 09:37 PM

I can feel the mood of the poem. Great write.

Eliza Simmons
~Sometimes when I look back at what I wrote, I don't recognize the 'Me' in the past anymore.

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