Teen Poetry #6 |
I Need To Learn |
Rug_Burnt_Loser Junior Member
since 2002-12-13
Posts 11>>o.b.l.i.v.i.a.n<< |
Sitting here, Freezing.. Just so I can be Alone. I need someone Though.. I need an extra Voice. Convince me.. This will all Turn out okay. Convince me.. It was all Supposed to be this way. They were all right. I ended up broken. Lying here, Emptily.. Hoping someone Can see. I need some Attention.. No one has been Listening. Since you left.. I don’t see To matter. Since you left. My mind and heart Seem to have scattered.. They were all right. I ended up broken. Again And again And again. "In a photo the size of a kiss, a kiss in the shape of a bullet..." |
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wvplayernotreally Member
since 2002-11-06
Posts 215yakima wa |
"Convince me.. This will all Turn out okay. Convince me.. It was all Supposed to be this way" Hey great first post! I really really liked this one...hope to see more of your work i will be watching out for it " I think I got a tan from the light in which i was basking." |
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dinky Member
since 2002-10-19
Posts 258 |
hey, this was awesome!! i luved it ! great first post as rug burnt loser!! lol so u dont live in oblian or w/e it was b4??? lol well this was reallly good ~samantha~ "sometimes i just feel like |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
First off, welcome to Passions Second, beautiful write; I'm sure you're going to make a wonderful addition to our little "family" here (aw, now I'm getting sappy lol) Keep writin'! "it was cute, it was like he was shy and didn't want to make it too obvious" |
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foreverwithyou Member
since 2002-10-20
Posts 204Wonderland |
do u want ppl to no who u r???? oh well i wont tell;-) i mean that would be weird to me ya no ?? losing all ur postz that would suck but u no u did it for my mom lol yea she dont hate u either and u have to come to my b day party but yea about the poem lol it was good as usual and thatz all there is to say.... ###CATHY### "I am who I am who I am who am I?" [This message has been edited by foreverwithyou (12-15-2002 10:08 PM).] |
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devinechild22 Senior Member
since 2002-08-28
Posts 571 |
CATHY HAS 144 POSTS!! 44!! 44!! ok Ihad to do that.. Anyway..yea...welcome to passions..*snickers* What a wonderful first write..Umm I can`t wait to see you grow as a poet? LOL I cant wait to see more of u!! *Allison* "O My love |
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xxxnuttyangelxxx Member
since 2002-12-06
Posts 72New York |
Quote-- Sitting here, Freezing.. Just so I can be Alone. I need someone Though.. That is a very true statement.. this was a great write ..I Hope to see a lot more of your work..Well done shea |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
This was wonderful, you did very well, this felt very real. Welcome!! Ps. Devinechild...you took my icon!! lol everytime I see you've replied I think...Wait? Did I already read this?! lol I get confused easily I suppose. Jenn "I keep looking, looking for something more." Sara Evans |
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Rug_Burnt_Loser Junior Member
since 2002-12-13
Posts 11>>o.b.l.i.v.i.a.n<< |
A big thanks to you all!! thanks for making me feel welcome! ((morgan)) "It feels good to know you're all mine So drive me far .away.away.away. I don't care where, just far!!" ~deftones~ ~.b.quiet.&.drive.~ [This message has been edited by Rug_Burnt_Loser (12-17-2002 07:24 PM).] |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Rug_Burnt_Loser~ Well, I'm gathering from some of the replies, that you're not really new to the forums, but I'll say 'Welcome' anyway. There is a great deal of emotion in this piece and you've expressed it extremely well. I felt this one as I read. I look forward to seeing lots more from you. ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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Hyper Sensitive New Member
since 2002-12-18
Posts 6a somnambulist society |
beautiful. -heatherlynne- |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
Beautiful first post Morgan! Welcome to Passions! I really enjoyed this first piece, especially the first stanza (which I am not going to copy and paste since 2 ppl have already done it haha). I can't wait to see more! |
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OtherSideOfTheMirror Member
since 2002-12-19
Posts 245 |
Nice use of bolds and itallics. |
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Riley
since 2002-07-18
Posts 1038in the pouring rain |
nice Morning mist clings to my face, and my soul opens up to you...... |
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aries_luv_ppl Senior Member
since 2001-09-20
Posts 1448Universal Mind |
You've expressed the feeling very well. Enjoyed your poem. Eliza Simmons |
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