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What if God quit his "job"?
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What if God quit his "job"? |
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Stinky Twinkie Member
since 2002-11-26
Posts 204Dinwiddie |
Well, here is another fairly serious poem. I was thinking, "What if God quit his "job"? I decided to write a poem about it and this is how it came out. The first couple of stanzas are written from his point of view and the last one is in third person. NO TITLE YET FOR THIS ONE Overcome by the pressures of immortality in its greatest form. To outlive the spirits from years before and play the part of puppetmaster. And preface lives that haven't started. Overcome by the beckoning of delirium in its most evil form. I have failed to reconcile the differences with myself. A broken savior I have come to be. Half the world is rubble and enveloped in chaos. There are no longer any boundaries. The other part remains untouched, but not for long. The cup of discord and anarchy will fill up quickly and spill out. Yeah, that's it. It probably isn't that good but hey, what are you gonna do? By the way, don't give me any BS about religious stuff. This poem doesn't reflect any presonal views and I'm not saying that I think God is gonna quit. Don't forget to tell me how much I suck. -Stinky Twinkie- [This message has been edited by Stinky Twinkie (12-05-2002 06:34 PM).] |
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Skyfire 
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Woah, I really like this. I really really like it  No, on second thought, let's not go to Camelot. |
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Morgana Le Fay Junior Member
since 2002-10-25
Posts 22 |
You suck. Okay, now that that is over with - I liked the poem. Particularly the last stanza. Whether or not you were trying to make a statement is your choosing and personal view, but from a reader's perspective I think you made an important statement (that doesn't necessarily even relate to "God"). "I love the way we communicate. Your eyes focus on my funny lip shape." (T.A.) |
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Stinky Twinkie Member
since 2002-11-26
Posts 204Dinwiddie |
well, what do you think it was about? Or what did it relate to? I think that's what I'm trying to say... -Stinky Twinkie- [This message has been edited by Stinky Twinkie (12-05-2002 09:36 PM).] |
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stephanie Junior Member
since 2002-11-15
Posts 33 |
mmm..the last one i read and i posted that i love to read ur poems cause they always make me laugh well now im gonna contradict myslef a little bit and tell you that i love when you are serious!....this was a great poem! maybe you should be serious a lil more?? |
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Star T Member
since 2002-07-12
Posts 182Philadelphia, US |
hey stinkie thatw as really cool.it really is a nice thought u know..what if God DID quit his job?whoa the word will be such a big mess.nice poem stinkie. pleasee keep the "seriousness" enough so-called 'funny' poems.i'll be looking out 4 u ... |
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HopelessRomanticGuy Member
since 2001-08-17
Posts 495LI, New York |
This was a very well written poem! You write as well serious as you do when your not! I thouroughly enjoyed this poem. Keep Writin'! Rich "You can't hurt meee!! 'Cause I've got on my cheeeeese helmet!" |
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dinky Member
since 2002-10-19
Posts 258 |
hey, i really liked this poem keep writin! ~samantha~ "sometimes i just feel like |
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Stinky Twinkie Member
since 2002-11-26
Posts 204Dinwiddie |
First off, thanks to everyone for telling me how great I am (  ).Second, to Star T: what do you mean "enough of the so-called funny poems"? You can't be serious. Now, out of spite, I'm going to write nothing but funny poems. Congratulations, Hitler Jr., you've just lost your chance to see the serious side of the Stink Twink. I'm kidding......again. -Stinky Twinkie- [This message has been edited by Stinky Twinkie (12-07-2002 12:17 AM).] |
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